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2024-10-18 · 첨삭 강사 Sonny

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Writing task: What is the best age to travel? Can children appreciate the experience? answer: I don\'t think there is a best age to go on a trip. I think it\'s more about having a healthy and mental attitude. When I was 19years old I had a first abroad trip that time I was poor trip because I don\'t have money. But I assure this is my best trip and It\'s still like maybe the best memory. And my dad liked camping, so we went on a lot of family camping trips when I was young, and even though I don\'t know the location, I still have the good feelings and mood from that time. These experiences sometimes give me strength. I think it\'s definitely good for chilren.

강사 첨삭

Hello, Ms. [Name]! It is true that even if we don\'t have the best and perfect travel experiences, they still become precious memories as time goes by. Thank you for sharing!
-T. Sonny
I don\'t think there is a best age to go on a trip. 
>>Correct!
I think it\'s more about having a healthy and mental attitude.
>>Correct!
When I was 19years old I had a first abroad trip that time I was poor trip because I don\'t have money.
>>When I was 19 years old, I had my first abroad trip and at that time it was a poor experience because I didn\'t have money.
But I assure this is my best trip and It\'s still like maybe the best memory.
>>But I assure you that, that was my best trip and it still might be the most memorable.
And my dad liked camping, so we went on a lot of family camping trips when I was young, and even though I don\'t know the location, I still have the good feelings and mood from that time. 
>>Also, my dad liked camping, so we went on a lot of family camping trips when I was young, and even though I didn\'t know where we went, I still had good feelings and memories from them.
These experiences sometimes give me strength.
>>Correct!
I think it\'s definitely good for chilren.
>>In conclusion, I think, it is definitely good for children.

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