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2017-01-04 · 첨삭 강사 Lynn

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This years, I want to get IM level on the opic test. I also will go on a diet again. I think it is like a plastic operation because many people become have new face and body after successful diet. And then I want to spend some money for myself because I didn't spend money for myself. I always have worried about my future so I can't spend money. It is very difficult to me. However I decide that I don't be afraid. Sometimes I let myself to spend money because present is the best present. I will enjoy present this years.

강사 첨삭

Hi there Ms. [이름]!
Wow! You have so much to do in one year.
Take care!
~T. Lynn
This years, I want to get IM level on the opic test.
>> This years I want to get IM level on the OPIc test.
I also will go on a diet again.
>> correct!
I think it is like a plastic operation because many people become have new face and body after successful diet.
>> I think it is like a plastic surgery because many people look like they have new face and body after a successful diet.
And then I want to spend some money for myself because I didn\'t spend money for myself.
>> And then I want to spend some money for myself because I didn\'t spend money for myself last year.
I always have worried about my future so I can\'t spend money.
>> I am always worried about my future so I can\'t spend money.
It is very difficult to me.
>> It is very difficult for me.
However I decide that I don\'t be afraid.
>>However, I have decide that I won\'t be afraid anymore.
Sometimes I let myself to spend money because present is the best present.
>> Sometimes I let myself spend money because the present is the best present/gift.
I will enjoy present this years.
>> I will enjoy presents this year.

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