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2017-02-03 · 첨삭 강사 Lynn

학생이 쓴 원문

I can't understand this situation. There are many bad situation in my country because of North Korea. In my opinion, my country needs a lot of security system. Installing The Terminal High Altitude Area Defense (THAAD) missile system on the Korean Peninsula is one of the security system. China can't protect my country. So China must not oppose it. Also limiting Chinese tourists arriving in my country is one of the bad way. Before limiting chinese tourists arriving, China and my country's government have to do conversation. Anyway I am very difficult about poliitics. I like your this kind of question. Because I can have to think time about it. Thank you.

강사 첨삭

Hi there Ms. [이름]!
Wow, you did a good job in giving your opinion on today\'s topic. You are amazing, Ms. [이름]! Carry on!
Take care!
~T. Lynn
I can\'t understand this situation.
>> correct!
There are many bad situations in my country because of North Korea.
>> correct!
In my opinion, my country needs a lot of security system.
>> correct!
Installing The Terminal High Altitude Area Defense (THAAD) missile system on the Korean Peninsula is one of the security system.
>> correct!
China can\'t protect my country.
>> correct!
So China must not oppose it.
>> correct!
Also limiting Chinese tourists arriving in my country is one of the bad ways.
>> correct!
Before limiting Chinese tourists arriving, China and my country\'s government have to do conversation.
>> Before limiting Chinese tourists arrival, China and my country\'s government should have a conversation.
Anyway I am very difficult about politics.
>> Anyway, politics is very difficult for me.
I like your this kind of question.
>> I like this kind of questions.
Because I can have to think time about it.
>> Because I have to think about it.
Thank you.
>> correct!

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