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2016-11-09 · 첨삭 강사 Lynn

학생이 쓴 원문

In my opinion, love is the most important in our lives. In my case, I learned love with my family. I always missed family's love because my father died when I was 10 years old. So I always envied my friends because I had no memory with my father who was very ill for a long time. My mother was always very busy after my father died. She had no free time with me. However after I got married, I feel my family's love everyday. Thanks to them I am happy and I am learning unconditional love. I am always sorry to them because I am not good as mother and I am not good as wife. That are the reason why love is the most important in our live.

강사 첨삭

Hi there Ms. [이름],

I understand how you feel. But don\'t say that you are not a good mother and wife. You are thinking and doing what is best for your family everyday so you are a bad mother and wife. Cheer up, Ms. [이름]! Be strong!

Take care!

~T. Lynn

In my opinion, love is the most important in our lives.

>> correct!
In my case, I learned love with my family.

>> In my case, I learned how to love from my family.
I always missed family\'s love because my father died when I was 10 years old.

>> I had been missing a family\'s love because my father died when I was 10 years old.
So I always envied my friends because I had no memory with my father who was very ill for a long time.

>> correct!
My mother was always very busy after my father died.

>> correct!
She had no free time with me.

>> She had no time for me.
However after I got married, I feel my family\'s love everyday.

>> correct!
Thanks to them, I am happy and I am learning about unconditional love.

>> correct!
I am always sorry to them because I am not good as mother and I am not good as wife.

>> I am always sorry because I am not a good mother and wife.
That are the reason why love is the most important in our live.

>> That is the reason why love is the most important thing in life.

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