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2018-10-30 · 첨삭 강사 Glenda

학생이 쓴 원문

Nowadays Korean songs and singers are very famous in the world. I am proud of them. My children like to listen to BTS music/songs. It is very fast and hard for me to understand. These days, many teenagers like very fast and noisy music like my children. I can't understand this music when I listen to them. I hope many teenagers enjoy listening to ballad and classical music. And then they can get comfortable like me. Ballad is my favorite type of music. It makes me comfortable and calm.

강사 첨삭

Nowadays Korean songs and singers are very famous in the world.

>> Nowadays, Korean songs and singers are very famous in the world.

or

>> Nowadays, Korean singers and their songs are becoming famous around the world.
 I am proud of them.

>> Correct
 My children like to listen to BTS music/songs. 

>> Correct 
 It is very fast and hard for me to understand. 

>> Correct
 These days, many teenagers like very fast and noisy music like my children.

>> Correct 
 I can\'t understand this music when I listen to them.

>> I can\'t understand these music when I listen to them.
 I hope many teenagers enjoy listening to ballad and classical music.

>> Correct 
 And then they can get comfortable like me. 

>> Correct 

or

>> And they can be comfortable with it like me.
 Ballad is my favorite type of music.

>>Correct

or

>> Ballad is my favorite genre of music.
 It makes me comfortable and calm.

>> Correct

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