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2024-10-21 · 첨삭 강사 Sonny

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HOMEWORK FOR TODAY: Writing task: Are you a hard worker? What motivates you to work? I think I did but I\'m not hard worker as much as before.. I think motivate is recognize. so in the past I was hard worker because I has many greed a promotion and career develop, so I got a new job too. But since I had a kid, my life has changed. I focused my kid and famliy than my life(career develop), I began to reduce my greed about promotion or my career develop But I\'m not giving up, I\'m goiong to go a little slowly. And I realized while raising to child, money is important!! lol Maybe my motivation was money...?

강사 첨삭

Hello, Ms. [Name]! Thank you for not giving up. I am happy to hear that you are trying to get back gradually. I know you can do it one step at a time. Than you for sharing!

-T. Sonny

I think I did but I\'m not hard worker as much as before..

>>I think, I used to but not as hardworking as I was before.
I think motivate is recognize.

>>I think, my motivation was recognition.

so in the past I was hard worker because I has many greed a promotion and career develop, so I got a new job too.

>>So, in the past, I was a hard worker because of my greed for promotion and career development which resulted to getting a new job, too.
But since I had a kid, my life has changed.

>>Correct!
I focused my kid and famliy than my life(career develop), I began to reduce my greed about promotion or my career develop

>>I focused on my kid and family more than my life and career so my greed for those things decreased.
But I\'m not giving up, I\'m goiong to go a little slowly.

>>But I am not giving up and will gradually get back.
And I realized while raising to child, money is important!! lol

>>And I realized while raising a child that money is important.
Maybe my motivation was money...?

>>Money might be my current motivation.

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