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2015-05-20 · 첨삭 강사 camille

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Q>>Is religion important to people? Explain your answer by giving some examples. It depends. People like me with strong minds usually do not believe in any religion. But those who are the opposite of me easily have faith since they are fragile even with trivial problems. If somebody applies to the latter, having faith for Gods could be good for handling their mentalities. And there might be tremendous impact i can't imagine on religion thing. that's why the religions have preferred by many people around the world so far, i guess.

강사 첨삭

My dear [이름],

I totally agree with you.

Having a religion should be a [이름]ce. I heard that some people have religions because of their families or parents.

But our belief is very important.

So just go for whatever you believe in.:)
Take care and have a great day...

xoxoTeacher Cam^^

Q>>Is religion important to people? Explain your answer by giving some examples.
It depends.

>>correct

People like me with strong minds usually do not believe in any religion.

>>correct

But those who are the opposite of me easily have faith since they are fragile even with trivial problems.

>>correct

If somebody applies to the latter, having faith for Gods could be good for handling their mentalities.

>>correct

And there might be tremendous impact i can\'t imagine on religion thing.

>>And there might be tremendous impact i can\'t imagine on religious thing.

that\'s why the religions have preferred by many people around the world so far, i guess.

>>correct

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