19/09/2018 homework
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강사 첨삭
Hello Jun,
Great job in your homework!!!
I can see you\'re trying hard to learn. Your discipline is good, keep it up. Keep applying in your daily life what you learn every day. Knowledge will give you power. Power will give the confidence that you need. You can do it if others can, so can you. Enjoy your day! ^^
T. Jeny
Q : How can you develop a good habit?
>>correct
To develop good habit like reading a book or regularly exercise, diligent attitude is necessary.
>>To develop a good habit like reading a book or a regular exercise, a diligent attitude is necessary.
So, we should throw away all of lazy mind myself and then search good habit.
>>So, we should get rid all of our lazy minds and then search a good habit.
We can grow up to be good person with good habit.
>>We can grow up to be a good person with good habits.
But it is not easy because many people want to spend their time with enough relaxation like watching TV, playing game.
>>But it is not easy because many people want to spend their time with enough relaxation like watching TV and playing a game.
In case of me, I’m trying to spend my time without any electronic device like mobile phone, computer, TV.
>>In my case, I’m trying to spend my time without any electronic devices like mobile phone, computer, and TV.
Using many device is so funny but it can become waste of time. Instead of that time, I’m trying to read a book or think like meditation.
>>Using many devices is fun but it can become a waste of time, I’m trying to read a book or meditate instead.
I\'m sure that time makes me better man.
>>I\'m sure that time will make me a better man.
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