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In my opinion, it is important to save some money for in the future. People need a lot of money for their life. So people have to prepare for their future. In my case, after I save some money, I will go to trip oversea with my family. Also I am saving some money for my future. When I am old, I will use them to check my health and my family's health. Of course, when people is young, people have to enjoy their life. However don't forget, people have to think about future.

Hi [이름]! I appreciate you doing the homework again. You are very responsible - please keep it up!I have listed some corrections for you below. I will talk to you tomorrow again.Have a great evening!   = Teacher Bella =     In my opinion, it is important to save some money for in the future. >> In my opinion, it is important to save money for the future. People need a lot of money for their life. >> People need a lot of money for their lives. So people have to prepare for their future. >> So people need to prepare for their future. In my case, after I save some money, I will go to trip oversea with my family.>> In my case, after saving some money, I will travel overseas with my family. Also I am saving some money for my future. >> Also, I am saving some money for my future. When I am old, I will use them to check my health and my family\'s health.>> When I get old, I will use those for my health and my family\'s too. Of course, when people is young, people have to enjoy their life. >> Of course, when people are young, they have to enjoy their lives. However don\'t forget, people have to think about future. >> However, people should not forget to think about their future.