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2016-12-06 · 첨삭 강사 Lynn

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My eldest daughter is my first child. So she is very important in my life more than my husband. When my young daughter was born, she grew up and she already became7 years old. So I have to take care of my young daugher beacuse she is very younger than her sister. However I love my children as same.

강사 첨삭

Hi there [이름]!
I always hear that from my mom when I was young. She said, \"I don\'t have a favorite child. I love you all equally.\" I guess that\'s a mom thing. I mean, mothers all over the world say the same thing.
Take care!
~T. Lynn
My eldest daughter is my first child.
>> correct!
So she is very important in my life more than my husband.
>> correct!
OR>> So she is very important to me. She\'s even more important than my husband.
When my young daughter was born, she grew up and she already became7 years old.
>> Then my younger daughter was born, she grew up and she is already 7 years old.
So I have to take care of my young daugher beacuse she is very younger than her sister.
>> So I have to take care of my younger daughter because she is younger than her sister.
However I love my children as same.
>> However, I love my children equally.

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