19

2017-02-20 · 첨삭 강사 Lynn

학생이 쓴 원문

In my opinion, he had a big mistake. His mistake built up the wave of national resentment. In the future in my country, many people might miss out on a state pension because of him. Also, Samsung Group can't plan and decide a lot of things because of their boss. For example, employment, contract and a lot of things. Many young people in my country have to wait Samsung's employment but they have to wait for a long time again. I think politics and business are not easy.

강사 첨삭

Hi there Ms. [이름]!
Well, if Mr. [Name]-Yong did really what was accused of him then you should be punished by the law. It seems that many things are happening in your country right now. See you in class!
Take care!
~T. Lynn
In my opinion, he had a big mistake.
>> In my opinion, he made a big mistake.
His mistake built up the wave of national resentment.
>> correct!
In the future in my country, many people might miss out on a state pension because of him.
>> correct!
Also, Samsung Group can\'t plan and decide a lot of things because of their boss.
>> correct!
For example, employment, contract and a lot of things.
>> correct!
Many young people in my country have to wait Samsung\'s employment but they have to wait for a long time again.
>> Many young people in my country have to wait for Samsung\'s employment schedule and now they have to wait for a long time again.
I think politics and business are not easy.
>> correct!

파워잉글리쉬 영어첨삭교정 서비스에 실제로 접수된 글입니다. 작성자와 글에 등장하는 사람·회사 이름, 연락처 등 개인을 알아볼 수 있는 정보는 모두 지웠습니다. 문법 오류는 학습 자료로서의 가치를 위해 원문 그대로 두었습니다.

다른 영어첨삭교정 보기