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2017-05-02 · 첨삭 강사 Lynn

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I want to spend enjoyable time with my family on the weekend. But it is change by time. Most children want to spend with their friends and most husbands too. But most wifive and mothers want to spend with their family more than their friends. So they can not have their friends for a long time.

강사 첨삭

Hi there Ms. [이름]!(\",)

I guess the likes and wants of each family member is different. But I say, since your husband and your children would rather spend their weekend with their friends, do that too. Have fun with your friends over the weekend for a change.

Take care!

~T. Lynn

I want to spend enjoyable time with my family on the weekend.

>> I want to spend an enjoyable time with my family on the weekend.
But it is change by time.

>> But it is changed by time.
Most children want to spend with their friends and most husbands too.

>> Most children want to spend time with their friends and most husbands too.
But most wifive and mothers want to spend with their family more than their friends.

>> But most wives and mothers want to spend their free time with their family more than their friends.
So they can not have their friends for a long time.

>> So they cannot stay with their friends for a long time.

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