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Hi there Ms. [이름]!(\",)
I agree with you. Health is the most important in life. Money is meaningless if you are unhealthy. You cannot live happily even if you are the wealthiest person on Earth if you are always sick. So let\'s exercise and eat a balance diet to be healthy Ms. [이름]!(\",)
Take care!(\",)
~T. Lynn
The most important thing for my family is health.
>> correct!
In case of my mother and my sister-in-law did not good health.
>> In case of my mother and my sister-in-law, they did not have good health.
OR>> My mother and sister-in-law were unhealthy.
They saved money and didn\'t spend money despite for themself.
>> They saved money but despite that, they didn\'t spend money for themselves.
The most things is they cann\'t spend enjoyable time with their family for long time.
>> They weren\'t able to spend enjoyable time with their families for a long time.
I hope my family live for a long time with me.
>> I hope I can live with my family for along time.
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