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2015-05-20 · 첨삭 강사 camille

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How do you foresee yourself in 20 years? Would you consider yourself still successful? Give some examples. I don't know. I can't see anything ahead of me. I've lived under strict regulations at home and school for about 20 years through the curriculums. Five months have passed since my last semester was over. I eagerly desired for this time during my university life. But the only thing i'm recently doing is taking Phone English class and applying for small companies. Like every kids did, i was so convinced of my life's success. I thought i would become president of some country at least. how ridiculous i was. I'm in the most important period of my life. In this period, my life's quality will be decided. I know the first job can't decide for anything about my life of course. but I'm afraid of everything ahead of my life for now... Willian Shakespeare said "We know what we are, but not what we may be." Sarang [이름] would say,"I know what i am, but not what i may be."

강사 첨삭

Wow! You really impressed me with this composition my dear [이름]! You did really good.

I was actually smiling while reading your homework because I totally agree with what you said.

I just do hope that I could be as optimist as you are. :)

You have so many things ahead of you my dear. You are a very good student and daughter to your parents so I don\'t see any reason for you to fail.

Keep n believing my dear. Because I do believe in you...^^
Take care always and have a great day...

xoxoTeacher Cam^^

How do you foresee yourself in 20 years? Would you consider yourself still successful? Give some examples.
I don\'t know.

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I can\'t see anything ahead of me.

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I\'ve lived under strict regulations at home and school for about 20 years through the curriculums.

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Five months have passed since my last semester was over.

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OR: Five months have passed since my last semester ended.

I eagerly desired for this time during my university life.

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But the only thing i\'m recently doing is taking Phone English class and applying for small companies.
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Like every kids did, i was so convinced of my life\'s success.

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I thought i would become president of some country at least.

>>I thought I would become a president of some countries at least.

how ridiculous i was.

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I\'m in the most important period of my life.

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In this period, my life\'s quality will be decided.

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I know the first job can\'t decide for anything about my life of course.

>>correct

but I\'m afraid of everything ahead of my life for now...
>>correct
Willian Shakespeare said \"We know what we are, but not what we may be.\"

>>correct
 Sarang [이름] would say,\"I know what i am, but not what i may be.\"

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