190116 homework

2019-01-21 · 첨삭 강사 Jedah

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If you were to create a superhero, what would be its characteristics or qualities and how would it look like?- (^-^) If I were to create a superhero, I want to call him Y-duts, because it is study if I spell it the other way. Y-duts is a very smart AI robot. This robot is made of recycled plastic, so it is not that expensive and every Y-duts has different colors. Y-duts has a size of fist and has wheel on the bottom so that it can roll around the table. It has a speaker on the back and in the front, there is its face on the monitor. It helps me with my homework and improves my grades by making a study plan and a learning environment. When I\'m depressed by the academic stress, Y-duts, which can also have conversation will loose my stress by talking. I think it would be very useful for me in many ways. I hope it could exsist for real.

강사 첨삭

Hi Yun Chae! A great day to you! ^ ^ Thank you for accomplishing your homework and sharing something really unique! I appreciate it a lot! ^ ^

Well like I have said, this idea of yours; this imagined robot of yours is very unique! Instead of creating a hero, you would like and efficient and very helpful AI to help you with your studies! Awesome, I like it.

Your sentences were awesome too, just a very few mistakes with your articles. Overall, it\'s a very good composition! Keep it up! ^ ^

-Teacher Jedah


If I were to create a superhero, I want to call him Y-duts, because it is study if I spell it the other way.

>>Correct

Y-duts is a very smart AI robot.

>>Correct

This robot is made of recycled plastic, so it is not that expensive and every Y-duts has different colors.

>>Correct

Y-duts has a size of fist and has wheel on the bottom so that it can roll around the table.

>>Y-duts  is only a fist size and has a wheel on the bottom so that it can roll around the table.

It has a speaker on the back and in the front, there is its face on the monitor.

>>It has a speaker on the back and in the front, and its\' face is on the monitor.

It helps me with my homework and improves my grades by making a study plan and a learning environment.

>>Correct

When I\'m depressed by the academic stress, Y-duts, which can also have conversation will loose my stress by talking.

>>When I\'m depressed due to academic stress, Y-duts, can also initiate a conversation with me that may help lessen my stress.

I think it would be very useful for me in many ways.

>>Correct

I hope it could exsist for real.

>>Correct or

>>I hope my imagined robot will become real.

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