2.09.2012.
학생이 쓴 원문
What are you going this weekend?
I think i am going hiking with my girlriend that situation is very good for us.
Because we have to lose just weight.
in my case,My love hendles is getting big so i think i'm getting old.
and it's very helpful to maintain for our health.
It's not easy to recovery our health if i lose my health but many people are not aware of their health until losing their health.
We have to step up our mind about health.
But nowadays all over the world people want to keep their good health while living.
So i also save in pension and premium in my country.
Because my parents recommended me last year.
I think i've learned some skills from my parent's to save money.
It's not at a low price things what i save in that accounts.
I'm not pretty sure about myself,
I think definitely i will go hiking with my girlfriend but nowadays my father wants to join us to go hiking together.
Because my father love to go hiking or enjoy many exercise.
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What are you going this weekend?I think i am going hiking with my girlriend that situation is very good for us.
>>I think I will go hiking with my girlfriend and we enjoy it.Because we have to lose just weight.
>>Because we have to lose weight.in my case,My love hendles is getting big so i think i\'m getting old.
>>In my case, my love Hendles is growing big so I think I\'m getting old.and it\'s very helpful to maintain for our health.
>>and it\'s very helpful for us to maintain a good health.It\'s not easy to recovery our health if i lose my health but many people are not aware of their health until losing their health.
>>It\'s not easy to recover from sickness, many people are not aware being fit is good for their health.We have to step up our mind about health.
>>We have to think of our health.But nowadays all over the world people want to keep their good health while living.
>>Nowadays, all of the people want to keep a healthy body while they live.So i also save in pension and premium in my country.
>>So, I also save money for my pension.Because my parents recommended me last year.
>>Because my parents advised that to me last year,I think i\'ve learned some skills from my parent\'s to save money.
>>I think I\'ve learned how to save money from my parents.It\'s not at a low price things what i save in that accounts.
>>I save small amount in my account.I\'m not pretty sure about myself,
>>I\'m sure about that.I think definitely i will go hiking with my girlfriend but nowadays my father wants to join us to go hiking together.
>>My father invited us to join him fo hiking.Because my father love to go hiking or enjoy many exercise.
>>Because my father loves hiking and exercising.
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