2. 12. Homework

2018-02-13 · 첨삭 강사 Blair

학생이 쓴 원문

Answer the question below. Provide details and support your answers. Do you think that happiness lies within you? Or does it depend upon other people and external things? Happiness depends on both internal and external causes. Internal mind is important. In same circumstance, positive attitude makes people happy but negative attitude makes people angry. External things such as money, relationship are also important. People who don't have money to buy food can't be happy even though they are very positive. So, I think both are very important.

강사 첨삭

Happiness depends on both internal and external causes. Internal mind is important. In same circumstance, positive attitude makes people happy but negative attitude makes people angry. External things such as money, relationship are also important. People who don\'t have money to buy food can\'t be happy even though they are very positive. So, I think both are very important.


Happiness depends on both internal and external causes. The state of our internal mind is important, in circumstances wherein positive attitude makes us happy it also affects other people, but if we have negative attitude, it can make people enraged. On the other hand, external things such as money and relationships are also important. People who don\'t have money to buy food and feed their own mouth can\'t be happy even though  they are very positive. So, I believe both are important factors.

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