2/13 Writing Exercise: Some people think that it should be compulsory for people to retake their dri
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Writing Exercise: Some people think that it should be compulsory for people to retake their driving test every 5 years. What are the advantages and disadvantages of doing this?
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It is meaningful to make people retake their driving test every 5 years.
>> It is relevant to make people retake their driving test every 5 years.
At the same time, it has negative perspectives.
>> However, there might be negative reactions against it.
Let me explain both view.
>> Let me explain both views.
By making people retake their driving test every 5years, we can get some benefits.
>> By making people retake their driving test every 5 years, we can get some benefits.
One of the advantages is that it can decrease traffic accidents caused by elders.
>> One of the advantages is that it can decrease the number of traffic accidents caused by elders.
When a person gets old, his body condition may be more and more inappropriate to driving a car.
>> As a person gets older, his condition may be less and less suitable to driving a car.
For example, after 60 years old, some can\'t clearly figure out traffic light, which leads to an accident.
>> For example, people above 60 years old can\'t clearly figure out traffic lights, which leads to an accident.
If it is duty to retake the test, we can figure out who needs to give up driving.
>> If they were required to retake the test, we can figure out who needs to give up on driving.
And it will prevent these types of accidents.
>> It will prevent these types of accidents.
Also, this policy can lead people to understand reformed traffic law which can confuse people.
>> Also, this policy can lead people to understand reformed traffic law which could be confusing for some.
According to a report of Seoul National University, 30% of the law changes every 5 years.
>> Correct
That is, The policy can help people understand the changed part of the law.
>> Therefore, the policy can help people understand the changes made in the law.
However, there are some problems.
>> Correct
First of all, it will cause governments to spend more money on managing the system of car licenses.
>> Correct
For example, governments need to check if a person should retake the driving test and if he has any acceptable reason not to retake.
>> Correct
Whether they invent an automatical program to check or check by hands, It will cause lots of money.
>> Both automatic and manual systems can cost lots of money.
In addition, people will be bothered by retaking.
>> In addition, it would be a bother for people to retake the test.
They will spend time for preparing test and test itself.
>> They will spend time for the preparation and the retaking of the test.
Because of these reasons, lots of people will disagree with the policy.
>> Correct
In summary, compulsory retaking driving test can be a double-edged sword.
>> In summary, compulsory retaking of the driving test can be a double-edged sword.
On the one hand, it can reduce car accidents and inform people of changes in traffic lawas
>> On the one hand, it can reduce car accidents and inform people of changes in traffic laws.
On the other hand, It can cause expenditure of governments and irritate people.
>> On the other hand, it can lead to government expenditure and it could irritate people.
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