2-16th Homework
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I think nothing get easily without an effort. Freedom would be various meaning. It would be free from parents or it would be an economic independence. But if you want to free from any restraints, you have to prepare something. This would be an economical or metal preparation. In animals, its cubs also prepare to independent from parents. The time is very shorter than humans. Our humans have to prepare for a long time to get the freedom or the independence. The discipline is the route to get the freedom. If you miss it, you could not get anything. If you are an animal and you don't any discipline before getting the freedom and you get the freedom, you will become a meal of other animals soon. Before going to the jungle, we have to learn how to hide and how to get the food, and who your friends are, etc. As like this, humans also have to learn how to say and who your friends are, and what it is good or bad. If you do this, you could not get along with, and finally you would be a looser.
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Hi, [이름]! ^^
Thank you again for industriously doing your homework.
I really admire your diligence. ^^
I enjoyed reading your opinions regarding the matter.
I think discipline is a very important characteristic/attitude.
Humans are generally subjected to their desires and impulses.
In most instances, when we want to have something, our most common reaction is to have/get it right away.
We don\'t consider our situations, the things, or the people involved.
Having self-discipline and delaying gratification is a talent.
It is an ability that most of us don\'t have.
My example for this one would be an employee who earns a lot of money but does not save or invest.
Immediately after he gets his paycheck, he squanders all of his money and buys the things that he wants.
He buys a big house and a flashy car. He goes on a vacation and buys expensive toys.
He gets indebted just to sustain all of his toys and waits for his next paycheck.
And the cylce goes on and on.
As a result, he gets indebted all his life and gets trapped.
He will never achieve financial freedom all because he lacked discipline and has chosen to gratify his wants immediately rather than delaying it and waiting for the right moment.
It is not so diffrent from your example about a young who wants to gain its independence from its parents.
When a young is not prepared to live in the wild, it would serve as the next meal to its predators immediately after it gains its independence.
It pays to be well-disciplined and the people who complain about discipline are exactly the people who don\'t have it.
Anyhow, I had a great time reflecting about this.
Thank you very much [이름].
I\'ll see you again on Tuesday. Enjoy your weekend!
~Teacher C[이름] ^^
I think nothing get easily without an effort.
>> [DO YOU MEAN]: I think nothing is easily acquired without an effort.
I think nothing get easily without an effort.
>> I think we cannot easily get something without an effort
Freedom would be various meaning.
>> Freedom would have various meanings.
OR >> Freedom has different meanings.
It would be free from parents or it would be an economic independence.
>> It could mean being free from one\'s parents or it could be an economic independence.
But if you want to free from any restraints, you have to prepare something.
>> But if you want to be free from any restraints, you have to prepare something.
OR >> But if you want to be free from any restraints, you have to be prepared.
This would be an economical or metal preparation.
>> This would be an economical or mental preparation.
In animals, its cubs also prepare to independent from parents.
>> In animals, the young also prepare to be independent from their parents.
The time is very shorter than humans.
>> Their time is shorter than humans.
Our humans have to prepare for a long time to get the freedom or the independence.
>> Us humans, have to prepare for a long time to get our freedom or independence.
The discipline is the route to get the freedom.
>> Discipline is a route to get freedom.
OR >> Discipline is a route that we could use to acquire freedom.
If you miss it, you could not get anything.
>> CORRECT!
OR >> If you don\'t harness it, you won\'t attain anything.
If you are an animal and you don\'t any discipline before getting the freedom and you get the freedom, you will become a meal of other animals soon.
>> If you are an animal and you don\'t have any discipline before getting your freedom, you will become a meal of other animals soon after you gain your freedom.
Before going to the jungle, we have to learn how to hide and how to get the food, and who your friends are, etc.
>> Before going to the jungle, we have to learn how to hide and how to get food. We also have to learn how to identiry our friends.
As like this, humans also have to learn how to say and who your friends are, and what it is good or bad.
>> [DO YOU MEAN]: Like in this situation, humans also have to learn how to identify who their friends are, and what is good or bad.
If you do this, you could not get along with, and finally you would be a looser.
>> If you don\'t do this, you could not get along well with others, and finally be a loser.
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