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2018-02-22 · 첨삭 강사 Shanee

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[About the best memory you have with your best friend] We have big test system to enter the university in end of high school season in Korea. After finish the test, we have short free time before announce the score. So, I went to an amusement park with my best friend after the test. At that time, I felt that my stress during my school years was gone. We took so many rides and had nice food in there. The amusement park was like children's book. We really enjoyed a lot. Sometimes, when I have strong stress nowadays, I think the day and me in there.

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[About the best memory you have with your best friend]

We have big test system to enter the university in end of high school season in Korea. 

>>> We have a big college entrance exam in in South Korea.
After finish the test, we have short free time before announce the score. 

>>> After the exam, senior high school students have a short break before the result comes out.
So, I went to an amusement park with my best friend after the test. 

>>> In my case, after finishing the test, I went to an amusement park with my best friend.
At that time, I felt that my stress during my school years was gone. 

>>> Correct!

>>> OR: At that time, I felt the stress accumulated during my school years was all gone.
We took so many rides and had nice food in there. 

>>> Correct!
The amusement park was like children\'s book.

>>> The amusement park was like that in the children\'s book.
We really enjoyed a lot.

>>> Correct!
Sometimes, when I have strong stress nowadays, I think the day and me in there.

>>> Sometimes, when I am severely stress nowadays, I think of the memory I had with my friend.

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