2/19 homework
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If I can buy anything, I would give time to my parents.
I know we can not buy time.
I believe that time is pair to everyone regardless of their wealth or honor.
We have equally 24 hours, but the quality of time depends on the person.
As we get older, we long for the time.
I heard that the velocity of time which people feel is faster according to age because we familiar with everything and struggle every moment to live or earn money.
I also agree with that.
When I was an undergraduate student, I had a lot of time.
However, I don\'t know why, but I don\'t have time every day now.
Maybe my parents also think like that.
So, If possible, I want to present enough time to challenge for their dream.
They spend a lot of time to care for me and my younger brother and sister.
And sometimes I thought they might regret that, because it was a kind of sacrifice.
I heard that my mom wanted to be a teacher, but now, she is my mother and my father\'s wife.
I want to five a chance as a time for my parents.
강사 첨삭
Hi [이름],
You are very much appreciated for always finding the time to do your homework despite your hectic schedule:)
-Rachel
If I can buy anything, I would give time to my parents. I know we can not buy time.
>> correct
>> If I can buy anything, I would give time to my parents even though time cannot be bought.
I believe that time is fair to everyone regardless of their wealth or honor.
I believe that time is fair to everyone regardless of their wealth or honor.
>> correct
>> I believe that time is fair to everyone regardless of his/her wealth or honor.
We have equally 24 hours, but the quality of time depends on the person.
We have equally 24 hours, but the quality of time depends on the person.
>> correct
>> Equally, were all given 24 hours, but the quality of time depends on the person.
As we get older, we long for the time.
As we get older, we long for the time.
>> correct
>> As we get older, we long for more time.
I heard that the velocity of time which people feel is faster according to age because we\'re familiar with everything and struggle every moment to live or earn money.
I heard that the velocity of time which people feel is faster according to age because we\'re familiar with everything and struggle every moment to live or earn money.
>> correct
>> I heard that most people feel the speed of time is faster according to age because we\'re familiar with everything and struggle every moment to live or to earn money.
I also agree with that.
I also agree with that.
>> correct
When I was an undergraduate student, I had a lot of time.
When I was an undergraduate student, I had a lot of time.
>> correct
However, I don\'t know why, but I don\'t have time every day now.
However, I don\'t know why, but I don\'t have time every day now.
>> correct (This is acceptable in spoken English)
>> This time, I don\'t know, but I don\'t have time everyday. (I removed the other conjunction, however)
Maybe my parents also think like that.
Maybe my parents also think like that.
>> correct
So, If possible, I want to present enough time to challenge for their dream.
So, If possible, I want to present enough time to challenge for their dream.
>> So if possible, I want to present them with enough time so they can challenge their dream.
They spend a lot of time to care for me and my younger brother and sister.
They spend a lot of time to care for me and my younger brother and sister.
>> correct
>> They spent a lot of time caring for me and my siblings.
And sometimes I thought they might regret that, because it was a kind of sacrifice.
And sometimes I thought they might regret that, because it was a kind of sacrifice.
>> correct (acceptable in spoken English)
>> And sometimes I think they regret that because it was a kind of sacrifice.
I heard that my mom wanted to be a teacher, but now, she is my mother and my father\'s wife.
I heard that my mom wanted to be a teacher, but now, she is my mother and my father\'s wife.
>> correct
I want to five a chance as a time for my parents.
>> I want to find a chance to give time to my parents.
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