2-22th Homework
학생이 쓴 원문
I think there are many different characteristics. When I honestly talk about something related with him, someone would accept this, but someone would not accept this. It's because the traits are different. Nobody want to be criticized. I suppose that you have a best friend, he seriously falls into a gamble. It's a very critical case. In this case, the friend don't want to listen your telling, he just want to get the money or to recover the loosen money. But you have to say that, repeatedly. And there is another condition. Don't lend the money, never. The addictive gambler always say that this time is last, therefore, I want to you to lend for me. But it is not true. If you don't give the money to the friend, he also say that you are not a true friend. Don't be taken a persuade. If so, you would lose your friend. Yeah, it is very critical. In normal cases, you have to be careful of telling the truth to your friend. Some friend would hate you. Some friend would be more close.
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Hi, [이름]! ^^
How\'s your day going so far?
I hope you\'re not too busy today.
Thank you very much for taking the time to write on our composition board today.
I am really happy with your sentences and I enjoyed reading your opinions.
I agree with you when you said that not all people are the same.
Some people are brave and strong while others are weak and sensitive.
Some can easily take the truth while others hide from it.
For me, honesty plays a very important role in every relationship and I think it is a strong foundation of friendship.
If your friends cannot be honest to you then they are not true friends.
As the saying goes, \'truth hurts\' but the \'truth will set you free\'.
Anyhow, that\'s my opinion regarding this matter.
I\'ll see you again next week. Enjoy your weekend. ^^
~Teacher C[이름] (^^,)
I think there are many different characteristics.
>> CORRECT!
OR >> In my opinion, there are different kinds of characteristics.
When I honestly talk about something related with him, someone would accept this, but someone would not accept this.
>> [DO YOU MEAN]: When I honestly talk about something related with my friends, some of them would accept the comments but others won\'t.
It\'s because the traits are different.
>> CORRECT!
OR >> It\'s because we are different from each other.
Nobody want to be criticized.
>> Nobody wants to be criticized.
I suppose that you have a best friend, he seriously falls into a gamble. It\'s a very critical case.
>> [DO YOU MEAN]: I suppose that if you have a best friend and he seriously falls into a gamble then it\'s a very critical case.
In this case, the friend don\'t want to listen your telling, he just want to get the money or to recover the loosen money.
>> [DO YOU MEAN]: In this case, your friend might not listen to you because all he could think about was the money he lost and how he could recover the money back.
But you have to say that, repeatedly.
>> CORRECT!
OR >> But you have to remid him repeatedly.
And there is another condition.
>> CORRECT!
OR >> There is another condition.
Don\'t lend the money, never.
>> Don\'t lend money ever.
OR >> Never lend money.
The addictive gambler always say that this time is last, therefore, I want to you to lend for me.
>> A gambler would always say that this is his last time to gambl and would therefore ask you to lend him money.
OR >> A person who is addicted to gambling would often tell you that it would be the last time for him to gamble and therefore ask you to lend him money.
But it is not true.
>> CORRECT!
OR >> However, it is not true.
If you don\'t give the money to the friend, he also say that you are not a true friend.
>> If you don\'t give the money to your friend, he will also say that you are not a true friend.
Don\'t be taken a persuade.
>> Don\'t be taken to persuasion.
OR >> Don\'t be persuaded.
If so, you would lose your friend.
>> CORRECT!
OR >> When this happens, you would lose your friend.
Yeah, it is very critical.
>> CORRECT!
OR >> It is a very critical situation.
In normal cases, you have to be careful of telling the truth to your friend.
>> CORRECT!
OR >> In most cases/instances, you have to be careful when telling the truth to your friend.
Some friend would hate you.
>> Some friends would hate you.
OR >> Some of your friends would hate you.
Some friend would be more close.
>> Some friends would be more close to you.
OR >> Some of your friends would be/become closer to you.
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