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Q: Many things that used to be done at home by hands are now being done by machines. Does this development bring more advantage or disadvantage?

I am using the auto electric plug at home. 

>>> Correct! 
I can turn on and off my electric machines by using my smart phone.

>>> Correct! 
And I am using the robot vacuum cleaner also.

>>> And I am also using the robot vacuum cleaner.
It\'s greatly convenient and save the time.

>>> OR: It\'s greatly convenient and time-saving.
I can make time to do different work. 

>>> I can have time to do some different work or activities.
I think most things doing by machine are good and convenient for human life. 

>>> I think most machines which are used at home are good and convenient for humans.
There are many concerns also, such as decreasing the human\'s job due to alternative machine. 

>>> On the other hand, there are many concerns such as decline in rate of job openings.
However, basically we can use the machines for more convenient lives at least home.

>>> However, basically we can use the machines to make our life at home convenient.
All people have same amount of the time, one day is 24 hours. 

>>> All people have the same amount of time which is 24 hours a day.
But, if we can use the machines well, we can control the time effectively.

>>> Correct!