2-27th Homework

2016-07-28 · 첨삭 강사 Charry

학생이 쓴 원문

Learning and recognizing knowledge is often good for everybody. When we work to do, if we have some information about that, it would be very helpful. Recently, my electric devices were soaked by seawater and they immediately corroded. But I want to fix one of them. And I opened the devices' case, I cleaned it and I removed a battery. I should have not removed the battery to retain data in memory which was volatile. I didn't know this until I found about the device in the web site. It was shown to me what important the information is. In the other cases, knowing would become a sickness. While we live, there is no need to know everything intentionally. Even If we don't know about something, there are no accident. It is very normal case. But if you recognize something and deeply think, it would be serious or become an accident. Of course, new knowledge makes people more happier and more convenient. Although it is true, knowledge is just knowledge. We need rather wisdom than knowledge.

강사 첨삭

Hi, [이름]! ^^ Thank you very much for once again writing in our composition board. :) I enjoyed reading about your opinions in relation to this topic. I think knowledge is good. But I also agree with you when you said we don\'t have to know everything to get by in our daily lives. We only need to know about the things that are useful and applicable for us. Lack of knowledge is dangerous because without sufficient knowledge, you might end up doing something that you would greatly regret later on. They say \'knowlege is power\' and I sincerely believe in it. Anyhow, that is my opinion regarding this matter. I hope you\'re having a great day. See you again tomorrow. ^^ ~Teacher C[이름] Learning and recognizing knowledge is often good for everybody. >> CORRECT! OR >> Learning and recognizing knowledge is often good for everybody. When we work to do, if we have some information about that, it would be very helpful. >> [DO YOU MEAN]: If we have some information about the work that we have to do, it would be very helpful. Recently, my electric devices were soaked by seawater and they immediately corroded. >> CORRECT! OR >> My gadgets were recently soaked in seawater and they immediately corroded. But I want to fix one of them. >> CORRECT! OR >> I wanted to fix one of those gadgets. And I opened the devices\' case, I cleaned it and I removed a battery. >> I opened the devices\' case, cleaned it and removed the battery. I should have not removed the battery to retain data in memory which was volatile. >> I should have not removed the battery to retain the data in the memory which was volatile. I didn\'t know this until I found about the device in the web site. >> CORRECT! OR >> I didn\'t know about it until I researched about the device from the Internet. It was shown to me what important the information is. >> [DO YOU MEAN]: I found out about the important information. In the other cases, knowing would become a sickness. >> In other cases, knowing too much would become a sickness. While we live, there is no need to know everything intentionally. >> CORRECT! OR >> There\'s no need for us to know about everything. Even If we don\'t know about something, there are no accident. >> [DO YOU MEAN]: Even If we don\'t know about something, it\'s not a problem. It is very normal case. >> It is a very normal case. But if you recognize something and deeply think, it would be serious or become an accident. >> But if you recognize something and deeply think about it, it would be serious or become a problem. Of course, new knowledge makes people more happier and more convenient. >> Of course, new knowledge makes people more happy and give more convenience. Although it is true, knowledge is just knowledge. >> CORRECT! OR >> It is true that knowledge is just knowledge. We need rather wisdom than knowledge. >> [DO YOU MEAN]: We should seek for wisdom rather than knowledge.

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