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2020-03-02 · 첨삭 강사 Rachel

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I think that anxiety is very similar to fear. And when I feel anxious when my self-confidence becomes low. The range of confidence is very large. When I think about the expected result that will bo not good or will fail, I feel anxious. In addition, when I feel lonely, I also feel anxious. In Korea, a person who has a very weak hearts called \'glass-mental\'. It means very weak and easy to break. But, sometimes we can be that mind state. When I am sick or lost my way, I am in a panic. Many bad and anxious situations occur to me. I believe that we need exercise to have a strong mind and spirit. One of the ways is experiencing many small failures from the new work and accept small bad situations. Often when I contact new work whenever I didn\'t I think I can do it and it will make me mature. However, sometimes I am at the moment where I can\'t do anything with big concern or anxiety. In that case, I will sleep first. In many cases, I feel much better after enough sleep.

강사 첨삭

Happy Monday [이름],
Let\'s kick off the week right! Thanks for the informative response to the homework I gave you:)
-Rachel
I think that anxiety is very similar to fear.
>> correct
And when I feel anxious when my self-confidence becomes low.
>> And I feel anxious if my self-confidence decreases.
The range of confidence is very large.
>> correct
When I think about the expected result that will bo not good or will fail, I feel anxious.
>> When I think that the expected result is not good or failed, I feel anxious.
In addition, when I feel lonely, I also feel anxious.
>> correct
In Korea, a person who has a very weak heart\'s called \'glass-mental\'.
>> correct
It means very weak and easy to break.
>> correct
But, sometimes we can be that mind state.
>> But sometimes, we can have that mind state.
When I am sick or lost my way, I am in a panic.
>> correct
Many bad and anxious situations occur to me.
>> I have encountered many bad and nerve-wracking situations. (wracking can also be spelled racking)
I believe that we need exercise to have a strong mind and spirit.
>> correct
One of the ways is experiencing many small failures from the new work and accept small bad situations.
>> correct
>> One way is experiencing many small setbacks from work and accepting unfavorable situations. 
Often when I contact new work whenever I didn\'t I think I can do it and it will make me mature.
>> Often when I am in a new environment and I feel like I can\'t do it, I change my way of thinking and it makes me more mature. 
However, sometimes I am at the moment where I can\'t do anything with big concern or anxiety. In that case, I will sleep first.
>> However, when I am in a desperate situation in which I can\'t do anything, I sleep first. 
In many cases, I feel much better after enough sleep.
>> correct

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