2-2nd Homework
학생이 쓴 원문
When we are working with others, I think there may be many opinions. Some members appeal to a leader so that he will select the opinions. But in the point of the leader's view, there are too many to consider or ponder. Sometimes, he may feel a tiredness about that. I cannot directly answer about this question whether the neglect is more better or not in working with others. I think it depends on the leader. If the leader has a powerful leadership, he could rearrange many opinions well. In this case, the project would be more productive. Of course, there is an exception. But if the leader keep on balance in many opinions, I think it would be possible. The rearrangement includes several means. It may be ignoring or accepting the opinions. If the rearrangement will be efficient, it would be very successful thing, but if not, it would be dangerous. Nobody want to fail to do something. But it is not easy to arrange and properly adjust many opinions to each situation. However, we have to do.
강사 첨삭
Hi, [이름]! ^^
How\'s your Wednesday going so far?
Thank you for writing in our composition board and sharing your opinions.
I enjoyed reading them. ^^
I think a leader should know when to listen to others\' opinions and when to ignore them.
Many leaders fail nowadays because they don\'t know when to listen and when not to listen.
When a leader has an adviser, he thinks that the adviser already knows everything.
Thus, he does not make a judgment of his own and just relies on his adviser.
He fails to listen to his inner voice, which is also known as his inner judgment.
I think that\'s the reason why the world is a messed up place because we have a lot of leaders who do this sort of thing.
Anyhow, I hope you\'re having a great day.
See you again tomorrow.
~Teacher C[이름] ^^
When we are working with others, I think there may be many opinions.
>> CORRECT!
OR >> When we work with others, I think we also get a lot of opinions.
Some members appeal to a leader so that he will select the opinions.
>> Some members appeal to a leader so that he will select their opinions.
But in the point of the leader\'s view, there are too many to consider or ponder.
>> But in the leader\'s point-of-view, there are too many to consider or ponder upon.
Sometimes, he may feel a tiredness about that.
>> Sometimes, he may feel tired from it.
I cannot directly answer about this question whether the neglect is more better or not in working with others.
>> [DO YOU MEAN]: I cannot directly say that neglecting other\'s opinions or not in working with others is better.
I think it depends on the leader.
>> CORRECT!
OR >> I think it\'s still up to the leader.
If the leader has a powerful leadership, he could rearrange many opinions well.
>> CORRECT!
OR >> If the leader has a powerful form of leadership, he could discern the bad opinions from the good opinions well.
In this case, the project would be more productive.
>> CORRECT!
OR >> In this instance, the project would have a better outcome.
Of course, there is an exception.
>> CORRECT!
OR >> However, there\'s always an exception.
OR >> However, this is not always the case.
But if the leader keep on balance in many opinions, I think it would be possible.
>> But if the leader keeps the opinions balanced, I think it would be possible.
The rearrangement includes several means.
>> [DO YOU MEAN]: The rearrangement would include several strategies.
It may be ignoring or accepting the opinions.
>> It may be through ignoring or accepting the opinions.
If the rearrangement will be efficient, it would be very successful thing, but if not, it would be dangerous.
>> If the rearrangement will be efficient, it would be very successful, but if not, it would be dangerous.
Nobody want to fail to do something.
>> Nobody wants to fail when doing something.
But it is not easy to arrange and properly adjust many opinions to each situation.
>> But it is not easy to arrange and properly adjust to many opinions in each situation.
However, we have to do.
>> However, we have to do it.
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