2-30th Homework

If I confined the education system of Korea, I could describe it as a competition in one word. For the first time, we learn about wining against friends. And we learn to admit this as a normal case. We were just compelled to remember the knowledge and now is also same. It was a competition with friends. Therefore, we could not easily reveal the ignorance. As soon as I discover it, it would become a looser. Finally, we want to hide it. If so, we could not get the opportunity of learning the new knowledge. It's because nobody knows the weakness of me. When we were in class, we hesitated to question about wondering things. We need a discipline to ask something and to answer something. We lack of this ability. I think the knowledge is not the remember but the understanding. In our society, we use the knowledge as the reference how to smart or clever he or she is. Therefore, the knowledge became a tool to decide their ability. On the other hand, it is not incorrect.Is there any method else?

Hi, [이름]! ^^ How\'s your day so far? I would like to thank you for doing your homework. I enjoyed reading your opinions. Like what you have mentioned from your essay, it is not easy to admit that you don\'t know something because the society sees it as a weakness. You are therefore forced to live up to the society\'s expectations even if you know that it\'s not good. Competing with one another is already considered as a \'norm\'. While it is true that competition could bring out the best in a person, it is also true that it could kill a person\'s creativity and curiosity. You study not because you want to learn something but because you are in a competition and it is a must for you to end up on top. I think it\'s a sad reality. But in order to survive, you have to conform to this norm. Otherwise you will end up trampled on. Anyhow, this is my opinion regarding this matter. I hope you\'re enjoying your time with your children. See you again tomorrow. :) ~Teacher C[이름] If I confined the education system of Korea, I could describe it as a competition in one word. >> [DO YOU MEAN]: If I define the education system of Korea, I could describe it as a competition in one word. For the first time, we learn about wining against friends. >> For the first time, we learn about winning against friends. And we learn to admit this as a normal case. >> CORRECT! OR >> And we\'ve learned to accept this as a norm. We were just compelled to remember the knowledge and now is also same. >> [DO YOU MEAN]: Back then, we were just compelled/forced to remember the information and now it is also the same for the younger generation. It was a competition with friends. >> CORRECT! OR >> It was a competition with our own friends. Therefore, we could not easily reveal the ignorance. >> Therefore, we could not easily reveal our ignorance. OR >> Therefore, it is not easy to admit our ignorance. As soon as I discover it, it would become a looser. >> As soon as I discover it, I would become a loser. Finally, we want to hide it. >> CORRECT! OR >> As an end result, we usually hide it. If so, we could not get the opportunity of learning the new knowledge. >> CORRECT! OR >> Because of this, we could not get the opportunity of learning the new knowledge. It\'s because nobody knows the weakness of me. >> It\'s because nobody knows my weakness. When we were in class, we hesitated to question about wondering things. >> [DO YOU MEAN]: When we were in class, we hesitated to ask question about things that made us wonder. We need a discipline to ask something and to answer something. >> We need to have a discipline to ask something and to answer something. We lack of this ability. >> We lack this ability. I think the knowledge is not the remember but the understanding. >> I think knowledge is not about remembering but understanding. In our society, we use the knowledge as the reference how to smart or clever he or she is. >> In our society, we use knowledge as the/a reference to tell how smart or clever a person is. Therefore, the knowledge became a tool to decide their ability. >> Therefore, knowledge became a tool to decide their ability. On the other hand, it is not incorrect. >> CORRECT! OR >> On the other hand, it is not wrong to do that. Is there any method else? >> Is there any other method? OR >> Is there another method?