2-31th Homework
학생이 쓴 원문
All of things has both sides, one is a good side and another is a bad side. The technical progress also has both sides. Many people have considered this and have argued about how to use it or how to control it. Personally, I'm very complex about the technical progress. It's because I'm working in the engineering area. As the techniques are being developed toward more complex and more complicated, some problems and side effects are happened together. Meanwhile, the problem was also solved by the technical progress. I think that humans want to make their life convenient, therefore, the technology would be continuously developed until humans disappear in the earth. The remained thing to do is how to use it in efficient and how to make it useful. This is the core of the technical progress. In this processing, the main concept, that is the philosophy, how to use it must be. If it is absent, the technology would become a monster that is able to destroy all of things.
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Hi, [이름]! (^_^)
I hope it\'s not too hot in your area today.
Thank you very much for promptly doing your homework.
Your sentences are impressive. ^^ Good job!
I agree with you when you said technology, like all the other things, has a positive and negative aspect.
The positive aspect is that, it makes our lives a lot more easy and convenient.
We can now work in the comforts of our home because of technology.
We live a comfortable life because of the benefits that are brought about by technical progress.
On the other hand, the negative aspect of it is that, people use it to carry out bad deeds.
A concrete example for this one would be the creation of weapons of mass destruction like nuclear bombs and war aircrafts.
In this regard, people should learn how to correctly use technology.
Otherwise, if we don\'t learn how to use and control it, it would one day become our greatest enemy.
Anyhow, that is my opinion with regards to this matter. See you again on Thursday.
Take care.
~Teacher C[이름] (^_^)
All of things has both sides, one is a good side and another is a bad side.
>> [DO YOU MEAN]: All things both have a good side and a bad side.
The technical progress also has both sides.
>> CORRECT!
OR >> The technical progress also has a positive/good side and a negative/bad side.
Many people have considered this and have argued about how to use it or how to control it.
>> CORRECT!
OR >> Many people know this and have argued about its proper use and control.
Personally, I\'m very complex about the technical progress.
>> CORRECT!
OR >> Personally, the technical progress feels complex.
It\'s because I\'m working in the engineering area.
>> CORRECT!
OR >> I\'ve said this because I\'m working in the engineering department.
As the techniques are being developed toward more complex and more complicated, some problems and side effects are happened together.
>> [DO YOU MEAN]: As the techniques become developed, more complex and more complicated, some problems and side effects arise.
Meanwhile, the problem was also solved by the technical progress.
>> CORRECT!
OR >> On the other hand, the problems that arise are also solved by the technical progress.
I think that humans want to make their life convenient, therefore, the technology would be continuously developed until humans disappear in the earth.
>> CORRECT!
OR >> I think human beings are geared towards a convenient life, therefore, the technology would be continuously developed until humans disappear in the earth.
The remained thing to do is how to use it in efficient and how to make it useful.
>> The remaining thing to do is to figure out how to use it in an efficient way and how to make it useful.
This is the core of the technical progress.
>> CORRECT!
OR >> This is the main goal of technical progress.
In this processing, the main concept, that is the philosophy, how to use it must be.
>> [DO YOU MEAN]: In this process, we should discover the main philosophy/concept of its use.
If it is absent, the technology would become a monster that is able to destroy all of things.
>> If it is absent, the technology would become a monster that is able to destroy all things.
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