2-34th Homework
학생이 쓴 원문
I think the education performed in school is a very basic behavior. Reading, writing, composition and calculation are provided in school, additionally there are more other things including thinking and consideration. But school is just school. In school, we can not learn more detail for a real life. It's because the real life is very variety. Actually, we learn from solving problems and we learn from a failure and also a success. It isn't all happening in school but in real life. The world is very variety, therefore in school we could not learn all things. In school, we just learn a basic rule. If you want to adjust it, you do in real life. In school, we could just more practice it to be accustomed to adjusting things in real life. But in school it is not real. There are many different things in the world. When we encounter them in real life, we just apply the rules learned in school to that situation. And we would learn from applying. That is a result of education in school.
강사 첨삭
Hi, [이름]! ^^
It\'s nice to read about your thoughts and opinions again.
In my opinion education does not only take place inside the four walls of our class rooms.
While it is true that teachers, books and manuscripts teach us a lot of things, it is also important for us to remember that we also learn from our experiences and from what happens in our environment on a day to day basis.
There are different kinds of intelligence.
Some of them are developed in school and some of them are developed outside the school.
What we learn inside the class room are mostly basic things that are enhanced and become more meaningful once we execute them in our daily activities.
Thank you for answering this essay question.
I am once again reminded that I should pay closer attention to what is happening to me and what is going on around me as these things might be opportunities to learn.
I hope you\'re having a great day. ^^Take care and God bless.
~Teacher C[이름]~
I think the education performed in school is a very basic behavior.
>> [DO YOU MEAN]: I think the education we get in school is a very basic form of education.
Reading, writing, composition and calculation are provided in school, additionally there are more other things including thinking and consideration.
>> Reading, writing, composition and calculation are provided in school. In addition to that, other things such as good manners and right conduct are also taught in schools.
But school is just school.
>> CORRECT!
OR >> But (a) school is just (a) school.
In school, we can not learn more detail for a real life.
>> In school, we can not learn more details about the real life.
It\'s because the real life is very variety.
>> [DO YOU MEAN]: It\'s because the real life has various things to offer.
Actually, we learn from solving problems and we learn from a failure and also a success.
>> Actually, we learn from solving problems. We also learn from our own failures and also our own successes.
It isn\'t all happening in school but in real life.
>> Everything doesn\'t happen in school but in real life.
The world is very variety, therefore in school we could not learn all things.
>> The world is very different. Therefore, in school we could not learn all things.
In school, we just learn a basic rule.
>> CORRECT!
OR >> We just learn a basic rule in school.
If you want to adjust it, you do in real life.
>> If you want to adjust, you have to do it in real life.
In school, we could just more practice it to be accustomed to adjusting things in real life.
>> In school, we could just do more practice for us to be accustomed to adjusting things in real life.
But in school it is not real.
>> CORRECT!
OR >> But the situation in school is not real.
There are many different things in the world.
>> CORRECT!
OR >> The world has many things to offer.
When we encounter them in real life, we just apply the rules learned in school to that situation.
>> CORRECT!
OR >> When we encounter problems in real life, we just have to apply the rules we learned in school to that situation.
And we would learn from applying.
>> And we would learn from applying it.
OR >> And we would learn from applying the rules we learned in school.
That is a result of education in school.
>> CORRECT!
OR >> That is what we get from the education we had in school.
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