2/4 homework

2020-02-04 · 첨삭 강사 Dee

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I think it would be boring and people lose their will. And the world would become more uncontrolled. We can easily imagine from vacation in childhood. At the beginning of the vacation, we were so excited that we don\\\'t have to go to school. But at the end of the vacation, the excited feelings cool down and we felt bored and wanted to go to school again. We say that I always enjoy my life without work. But, I know humans beings are social animals and it means we want to involve in the society and take a role. There are a lot of kinds of work in society from simple labor to professional. We have works that we want to do and we don\\\'t want to do. I think that when human beings feel a sense of duty and reward, we feel life is worthy. And the emotions come from job or work. We primarily work for the money, but it doesn\\\'t mean that other emotion and purpose are not important to work. I watched a movie in which human beings hang out and only robots work. But, people look boring and lazy.

강사 첨삭

Hello [이름]! Work is absolutely burdensome but it makes motivated to get better everyday. Everybody knows it\'s not easy so have to keep a balance. Have a productive day! ~~T.Dee

I think it would be boring and people lose their will.

>>CORRECT!
And the world would become more uncontrolled.

>>CORRECT!
We can easily imagine from vacation in childhood.

>>We can easily imagine it to be similar to having a vacation in our childhood.
At the beginning of the vacation, we were so excited that we don\\\'t have to go to school.

>> At the beginning of the vacation, we were so excited because we don\\t have to go to school.
But at the end of the vacation, the excited feelings cool down and we felt bored and wanted to go to school again.

>>CORRECT!
We say that I always enjoy my life without work.

>> We always say \"I enjoy my life without work\"
But, I know humans beings are social animals and it means we want to involve in the society and take a role.

>>But, I know humans beings are social animals and it means we want to be involved in the society and take a role.

There are a lot of kinds of work in society from simple labor to professional.

>>There are a lot of kinds of work in our society from simple labor to professional.

We have works that we want to do and we don\\\'t want to do.

>>There are jobs that we want and don\'t want to do.
I think that when human beings feel a sense of duty and reward, we feel life is worthy.

>>CORRECT!
And the emotions come from job or work.

>> And those emotions come from our jobs or the work we do.

We primarily work for the money, but it doesn\\\'t mean that other emotion and purpose are not important to work.

>>We primarily work for the money, but it doesn\'t mean that other emotions or purposes are not important while working.

I watched a movie in which human beings hang out and only robots work.

>>I watched a movie in which human beings just hang out and only robots work.

But, people look boring and lazy.

>>CORRECT!

>>OR: But, the people looked bored and lazy in that movie.

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