2-40th Homework

2016-09-06 · 첨삭 강사 Charry

학생이 쓴 원문

Conscience is a basic element for sustaining a society. Even if it is the fundamental thing to obey, we would often ignore it. It's because fame, power and money overwhelm conscience in our own mind. Money especially is a very powerful item for us to overcome. Many people think that money needs to live comfortably. They want to live affluently after retiring. Of course, they don't want to commit an illegal behavior to get the money. However, if their operation is not illegal, they would do that even if it don't meet their conscience. While we live in a society, we would face the events that is not illegal but don't meet conscience. To overcome the temptation of money is not easy way to a person who is also a super-rich. And other things are also difficult to overcome their temptation. Therefore, we always have to think about conscience. If not, we would be overwhelmed by the temptation that is very sugar. But I have also a room to live together. Don't always emphasize conscience.

강사 첨삭

A beautiful Tuesday to you [이름]! ^^ Money is important because it\'s a tool for us to acquire our basic needs such as food, clothing and shelter. However, making sure that your conscience is clean when pursuing it is far more important. Doing a work that pays well only provides temporary happiness because money can only provide you material things. Money is important but it should not be the highest priority in our lives. Money should not be the source of our happiness but rather a tool to help us and our loved ones achieve happiness. It\'s okay to aim for a high-paying job. There\'s nothing wrong with that. But the key to stay happy, aside from the high salary that you get is, you should be doing something because you love it. Otherwise, you lose the drive to perform well. On the other hand, it is necessary to have a clean consience and be financially okay at the same time. For me, both are equally important in order to succeed. I hope you are having a wonderful day. See you again on Thursday. Take care always. ~Teacher C[이름]  Conscience is a basic element for sustaining a society. >> CORRECT! OR >> Conscience is a basic element to sustain a society. Even if it is the fundamental thing to obey, we would often ignore it. >> CORRECT! OR >> Even if it is the first thing that we have to follow, we would often ignore it. It\'s because fame, power and money overwhelm conscience in our own mind. >> It\'s because fame, power and money overwhelm our conscience in our own mind. OR >> It\'s because fame, power and money overpower our own conscience. Money especially is a very powerful item for us to overcome. >> Money especially/specifically, is a very powerful item for us to overcome. Many people think that money needs to live comfortably. >> Many people think that money is needed to live comfortably. They want to live affluently after retiring. >> CORRECT! OR >> They want to live in abundance after retiring from their jobs/work. Of course, they don\'t want to commit an illegal behavior to get the money. >> Of course, they don\'t want to commit an illegal behavior to get money. However, if their operation is not illegal, they would do that even if it don\'t meet their conscience. >> However, if their operation is not illegal, they would do that even if it doesn\'t meet their conscience. While we live in a society, we would face the events that is not illegal but don\'t meet conscience. >> While we live in a society, we would face events that are not illegal but don\'t meet our conscience. To overcome the temptation of money is not easy way to a person who is also a super-rich. >> To overcome the temptation of money is not also easy to a person who is super-rich. And other things are also difficult to overcome their temptation. >> [DO YOU MEAN]: In addition to that, the temptation from other things is also difficult to overcome. Therefore, we always have to think about conscience. >> CORRECT! OR >> Therefore, we always have to consider our conscience. If not, we would be overwhelmed by the temptation that is very sugar. >> If not, we would be overwhelmed by the temptation that is sugar-coated. But I have also a room to live together. >> [DO YOU MEAN]: But I also have a room for other things. Don\'t always emphasize conscience. >> CORRECT! OR >> Don\'t always let your conscience overrule you.

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