2-45th Homework
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It's a non-sense. You are periodically checked the state whether it is appropriate to drive a car or not. I don't agree with a thought that someone who get older has to reapply for the license. Of course, if all get older, we would be getting worse on a sight ability and listening ability. Therefore, we have to check ourselves in order to get safety in driving the car. If older people have to reapply to get the license when they get older, the problem is how to determine the age for reapplying. Another problem is the fact that in younger people there are many people having bad sight or listening ability. Don't they need to reapply? If they don't need it, how to balance with older people. There are many problem. First of all, The thing that is very important is how to determine the age. Someone has a good ability, but someone has a bad ability. Maybe, we could not reach the conclusion. We are getting older and there is no exception. We live in a society, therefore we have to get along.
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Hi, [이름]! ^^
Thank you very much for taking the time to answer our homework for today. :)
Everybody is destined to get old.
It is true that with old age comes a weaker sight, slower reflexes and weaker hearing ability.
However, in my opinion, instead of just requiring the older people to reapply for the driver\'s license, why don\'t they just require everybody to undergo a test and implement it every year before renewing the license?
That way, nobody is exempted.
Nobody is subjected to prejudice and everybody is fairly assessed.
Anyhow, that is my opinion regarding this matter.
I hope you\'re having a great day.
See you again tomorrow. Take care and God bless. ^^
~Teacher C[이름] :)
It\'s a non-sense.
>> It\'s non-sense.
You are periodically checked the state whether it is appropriate to drive a car or not.
>> Your state is periodically checked to see whether it is appropriate for you to drive a car or not.
I don\'t agree with a thought that someone who get older has to reapply for the license.
>> I don\'t agree with the thought that an old person has to reapply for the license.
OR >> I don\'t agree with the thought that an elderly has to reapply for his/her license.
Of course, if all get older, we would be getting worse on a sight ability and listening ability.
>> Of course, everyone who gets older, would have a slight difference in his/her sight and listening ability.
Therefore, we have to check ourselves in order to get safety in driving the car.
>> [DO YOU MEAN]: Therefore, we have to check ourselves in order make sure that we are safe to drive a car.
If older people have to reapply to get the license when they get older, the problem is how to determine the age for reapplying.
>> CORRECT!
OR >> If older people have to reapply to get the license when they get older, the problem is in determining the age for reapplication.
Another problem is the fact that in younger people there are many people having bad sight or listening ability.
>> Another problem is the fact that in younger people there are also some of them who have a bad sight or listening ability.
Don\'t they need to reapply?
>> CORRECT!
OR >> Don\'t they need to reapply as well?
If they don\'t need it, how to balance with older people.
>> [DO YOU MEAN]: If they don\'t have to do it then it would be unfair for the older people,
There are many problem.
>> There are many problems that could arise from this.
First of all, The thing that is very important is how to determine the age.
>> First of all, the thing that is very important is how to determine the age.
Someone has a good ability, but someone has a bad ability.
>> CORRECT!
OR >> There are some who have good abilities and there are others who don\'t.
Maybe, we could not reach the conclusion.
>> CORRECT!
OR >> Maybe, we could not reach the conclusion we need/require
We are getting older and there is no exception.
>> CORRECT!
OR >> All of us would get old and there is no exception for this.
We live in a society, therefore we have to get along.
>> We live in a society and therefore we have to get along with each other.
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