2-46th Homework

2016-09-23 · 첨삭 강사 Charry

학생이 쓴 원문

Human beings have developed a lot of things for their convenience or their curiousness, for example, car, phone and computer. Such a kind of things are just the thing involving a non-biological material. Therefore, if we don't produce them, we could control them. But the biological material is not. Someone often says that the clone technique is useful to fix a disease, someone also says that human being can live longer than now through the biological technique. I think that it is a greed of human who wants to be a god. In the biology, there are various developments and the biologists want to go further. Until now, human has developed a lot of vaccines. But we never conquered any viruses using vaccines or medicines. The virus is a very very small thing that we can only see into a microscope. I think that the clone is very dangerous. It's because nobody can predict next things. Especially a human clone could make a serious situation. Basically, I disagree with the making clone.

강사 첨삭

Hi, [이름]! ^^ Thank you very much for answering our homework for today. I enjoyed reading your opinions in relation to this matter. I am also not in favor of cloning, especially human cloning. First, it goes agains my religious principles. I strongly believe that only God has the right to create living things. Cloning may have a lot of benefits but it could also backfire. Like what you have mentioned earlier, we don\'t know what to expect from this. Maybe it\'s alright to clone plants and animals but doing this could also result to genetic modification which could lead to more problems. Cloning human beings on the other hand is much more dangerous. Anyhow, that is my opinions regarding this issue. I  hope you are having a wonderful day. See you again on Tuesday. ^^ ~Teache C[이름] Human beings have developed a lot of things for their convenience or their curiousness, for example, car, phone and computer. >> CORRECT! OR >> Human beings have developed a lot of things for their convenience or their curiosity. To name a few, we have cars, phones and computers. Such a kind of things are just the thing involving a non-biological material. >> [DO YOU MEAN]: Such things only involve a non-biological material. Therefore, if we don\'t produce them, we could control them. >> CORRECT! OR >> Therefore, we could control their production. But the biological material is not. >> [DO YOU MEAN]: But reproducing biological materials is unacceptable. Someone often says that the clone technique is useful to fix a disease, someone also says that human being can live longer than now through the biological technique. >> Someone often says that the cloning technique is useful to fix a disease. Someone also says that human beings can live longer through this biological technique. I think that it is a greed of human who wants to be a god. >> I think this is due to the greed of humans who want to be a god. In the biology, there are various developments and the biologists want to go further. >> In biology, there are various developments and the biologists want to go further. Until now, human has developed a lot of vaccines. >> Until now, a human has developed a lot of vaccines. But we never conquered any viruses using vaccines or medicines. >> CORRECT! OR >> But we were never able to conquer any viruses using these vaccines or medicines. The virus is a very very small thing that we can only see into a microscope. >> The/A virus is a very small thing/particle that we can only see through a microscope. I think that the clone is very dangerous. >> CORRECT! OR >> I think that cloning is very dangerous. It\'s because nobody can predict next things. >> It\'s because nobody can predict the next things that would happen. Especially a human clone could make a serious situation. >> [DO YOU MEAN]: Having a human clone could result to a serious situation. Basically, I disagree with the making clone. >> Basically, I disagree with making a clone.

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