2-4th Homework

2016-06-02 · 첨삭 강사 Charry

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I think all of things over world is related with our. If someone said that there was nothing to relate with our, it would be false. It's because we live in the world together. Therefore, all of arts, including paintings, poem, sing, etc., I think, mirror of the world around us. People makes a lot of arts and people lives along with. We can get the another-point-of-view from other's sight, that is, the arts. Many people could not catch of the world, occasionally they ignore it. But artists have a good skill to catch the instant time in the world. And they are able to visualize it, it is the art, I think. When we see or listen or feel the arts, our inspiration would be awaken. I think it is the main role of the arts. But if there is only this role in the arts, it would be very terrible. People don't want to be taught intentionally. I think the arts are just to feel about something. If you want to get something in the arts, you would get tired fastly. I think Art is Feeling.

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Hello, [이름]! ^^ A fine Tuesday to you. Thank you very much for doing your homework even if you\'re not feeling well. I truly appreciate your effort. You\'re right when you said everything around us are connected including us. I think that\'s the reason why they say that there\'s no man who can live on his own because he needs others and all the other things around him to survive. I also agree when you said art is a form of expressing what we see, feel or think of what is going on around us. In addition to that, art is a way of appreciating what we have like in the case of paintings, poems or songs. It is also a way of relieving our daily stresses. That\'s the reason why art is considered important. I hope you\'re having a great day. Get well soon. See you again tomorrow. ~Teacher C[이름] ^^ I think all of things over world is related with our. >> I think all things in the world are related to us. If someone said that there was nothing to relate with our, it would be false. >> If someone says that there is nothing that relates to us, it would be false. It\'s because we live in the world together. >> CORRECT! OR >> It\'s because we all exist in this world. Therefore, all of arts, including paintings, poem, sing, etc., I think, mirror of the world around us. >> Therefore, all forms of art including paintings, poems, songs, and others mirror the world around us. People makes a lot of arts and people lives along with. >> People make a lot of art products and they live along with it. We can get the another-point-of-view from other\'s sight, that is, the arts. >> [DO YOU MEAN]: Getting other people\'s point-of-view is also an art. Many people could not catch of the world, occasionally they ignore it. >> Many people could not catch up with the world, so occasionally they ignore it. But artists have a good skill to catch the instant time in the world. >> [DO YOU MEAN]: But artists have a good skill in catching great moments in the world. And they are able to visualize it, it is the art, I think. >> And I think they are able to visualize and express it in the form of art. OR >> And I think they are able to visualize and express through art. When we see or listen or feel the arts, our inspiration would be awaken. >> When we see, listen to, or feel art, our inspiration would be awakened. I think it is the main role of the arts. >> I think it is the main role of arts. OR >> I think this is arts\' main role.   But if there is only this role in the arts, it would be very terrible. >> But if art only has this role, it would be very terrible. People don\'t want to be taught intentionally. >> CORRECT! OR >> People don\'t like to be taught intentionally. I think the arts are just to feel about something. >> [DO YOU MEAN]: I think the arts are just made base on a feeling about something. If you want to get something in the arts, you would get tired fastly. >> [DO YOU MEAN]: If you want to achieve something in the arts, you would get tired fast. I think Art is Feeling. >> I think art is a feeling.

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