2-57th Homework

2016-10-21 · 첨삭 강사 Charry

학생이 쓴 원문

Really? I'm so curious about it. It's because we don't care. In Korea, the gun accidents are rare and common people don't have a gun. Additionally, if you don't work in army or police, you could not touch or see it. Therefore, many children and parents don't care of playing with a toy gun. When I was young, I often played with my friends having a toy gun or a wood gun as running a mountain. Until now, I have never heard, "don't play with a gun" from my parents and adults. But I think this question would be related with US or Philippines. I know that possessing a gun in the US is legal. But I don't exactly about Philippines, however, I heard from the news about the gun accidents in Philippines. In these countries, many parents warn about playing with the gun even if the gun is a toy. Nowadays, many toy guns is like a real gun. And bullets could be shotted from the toy gun that is a BB gun. It is very dangerous if a bullet is directly shotted at the face.

강사 첨삭

Hi, [이름]! ^_^ How are you doing so far? I hope today is not too busy for you at work. Thank you very much for doing your homework. I think you\'re right when you said gun related accidents are rampant in some countries such as the US and the Philippines. Owning guns are allowed in the United States but in my country, it\'s not. That\'s why it\'s so alarming. That\'s also the reason why many parents and adults in my country don\'t think allowing children to play with toy guns is okay. A toy gun could actually be a powerful tool that could influence a young child\'s mind. The influence it could bring is very much the same with the influence of a violent video game or a violent movie. Anyhow, that is my point-of-view in relation to this matter. I hope you have a great Friday and weekend. See you again next week. Take care. ~Teacher C[이름] :) Really? >> CORRECT! OR >> Is that true? I\'m so curious about it. >> CORRECT! OR >> I\'m very curious about it. It\'s because we don\'t care. >> CORRECT! OR >> I\'m curious about it because it\'s not a big deal in my country. In Korea, the gun accidents are rare and common people don\'t have a gun. >> CORRECT! OR >> Accidents in relation to firearms in Korea are rare and common people are not allowed to possess a gun. Additionally, if you don\'t work in army or police, you could not touch or see it. >> Additionally, if you don\'t work in the army or the police department, you could not touch or see it. Therefore, many children and parents don\'t care of playing with a toy gun. >> Therefore, many children and parents don\'t care about toy guns. When I was young, I often played with my friends having a toy gun or a wood gun as running a mountain. >> When I was young, I often played with my friends using a toy gun or a wood gun while running in a mountain. Until now, I have never heard, \"don\'t play with a gun\" from my parents and adults. >> Until now, I have never heard parents and adults say, \"don\'t play with a gun\". But I think this question would be related with US or Philippines. >> But I think this question would be related to the US or the Philippines. I know that possessing a gun in the US is legal. >> CORRECT! OR >> I know that owning a gun in the US is allowed by the law. But I don\'t exactly about Philippines, however, I heard from the news about the gun accidents in Philippines. >> I don\'t exactly know the situation in the Philippines, however, I heard from the news about the gun accidents in your country. In these countries, many parents warn about playing with the gun even if the gun is a toy. >> In these countries, many parents warn about playing with guns even if the gun is a toy. Nowadays, many toy guns is like a real gun. >> Nowadays, many toy guns look like a real gun. And bullets could be shotted from the toy gun that is a BB gun. >> And bullets could be shot from the toy gun such as a BB gun. It is very dangerous if a bullet is directly shotted at the face. >> It is very dangerous if a bullet is directly shot at the face.

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