2-5th Homework
학생이 쓴 원문
This homework is also very difficult to describe my ideas. The word of "learn" may be based on that it is right and you have to do it. But there are many good things from the past. And they insisting their thought have a rule based on their's decision. We could also not ignore it. They believe it is right. Maybe, they don't think that they are afraid to give them up. If we decide on their behavior or thought on our point-of-view, It would be misunderstood. Of course, all of things changes. Therefore, the thought or the old assumptions would be not fit to current. But it is difficult to determine whether the old assumptions are right or not. It's because the decision is very the personal things that depend on the experience. In the big view, I agree with. We have to learn everything. But it is also difficult to do. All of us are normal. We are not a saint. However, we have to learn about something that change along with the society. If we do not, we would be apart from it.
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Hi, [이름]! ^^
Thank you very much for finding the time to do your homework even if you\'re not feeling well.
I could imagine how difficult it must have been for you.
I truly appreciate your diligence and dedication.
I agree with you when you said old ideas could sometimes be helpful especially if they\'re based from our own experiences.
However, learning new things and keeping ourselves updated with the current trends around us could also help us survive at present.
I think our own experiences and learning new ideas are equally important.
There are a lot of great people out there who became prominent because they dared to think outside the box.
They didn\'t limit themselves to what they only know and they didn\'t limit themselves to the old ideas.
They dared to question those ideas and as a result they got better ones.
The world is what it is today, because of these people.
Great civilizations were built because they know that experiences combined with up-to-date information would lead them to unimaginable discoveries.
That\'s how it is and that\'s how things will always be.
I hope you are feeling better.
I\'ll see you again on Thursday.
Take care. ^^
~Teacher C[이름].
This homework is also very difficult to describe my ideas.
>> It is also very difficult for me to describe my ideas in this homework.
The word of \"learn\" may be based on that it is right and you have to do it.
>> [DO YOU MEAN]: Maybe the word \"learn\" was based on what people think is right and you have to do it.
But there are many good things from the past.
>> CORRECT!
OR >> In my opinion, there are a lot of good things from the past.
And they insisting their thought have a rule based on their\'s decision.
>> [DO YOU MEAN]: Most people insist that their decisions were based from their experiences in the past.
We could also not ignore it.
>> CORRECT!
OR >> It\'s difficult for us to ignore it.
They believe it is right.
>> CORRECT!
OR >> They believe it is correct.
Maybe, they don\'t think that they are afraid to give them up.
>> [DO YOU MEAN]: Maybe, they are also afraid of giving them up.
If we decide on their behavior or thought on our point-of-view, It would be misunderstood.
>> [DO YOU MEAN]: If we compare their behavior or thought from our point-of-view, we might not understand them.
Of course, all of things changes.
>> Of course, all things change.
Therefore, the thought or the old assumptions would be not fit to current.
>> Therefore, the old assumptions would not be fit for the present times.
OR >> Therefore, the old assumptions would be out-dated.
But it is difficult to determine whether the old assumptions are right or not.
>> CORRECT!
OR >> However, it is difficult to decide whether the old assumptions are right or not.
It\'s because the decision is very the personal things that depend on the experience.
>> It\'s because the decision is very personal and it also depends on a person\'s experience.
In the big view, I agree with.
>> I agree with the bigger view.
We have to learn everything.
>> CORRECT!
OR >> We need to learn everything.
But it is also difficult to do.
>> But it is also difficult to do that.
All of us are normal.
>> CORRECT!
OR >> [DO YOU MEAN]: All of us are the same.
We are not a saint.
>> We are not saints.
However, we have to learn about something that change along with the society.
>> However, we have to learn about some things that change along with the society.
If we do not, we would be apart from it.
>> CORRECT!
OR >> If we fail to do that, we would be apart from it.
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