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2020-02-06 · 첨삭 강사 Dee

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I think that it is a good idea to meat co-workers outside work. But it should be after they already get along with each other. Socialization with them outside work under pressure should be avoided. In my parent period, companies have emphasized that all member of the company is like a family. But, in modern society, most people separately consider inside and outside work. They think that it is important to get along with co-workers, but it in just inside work. They don\'t want to meet or have a relationship with them outside work. I absolutely understand the thinking. The most popular word is \'Wo-Li-Bal\', it comes from \'work life balance\'. It means that work and life are separated. Surely, It depends on the person and the kind of work. When I was in Japan, I got along with my colleagues and sometimes we have met outside work. And they went to Jeju and we enjoyed together after I moved to Jeju island. But, the important thing is that it was what we wanted, not under compulsion.

강사 첨삭

Hello [이름]! Socialization is indeed natural among humans but the way we socialize is changing. Whatever the change, however, everyone should respect each other\'s preference. Have a good day! ~~T.Dee


I think that it is a good idea to meat co-workers outside work.

>>CORRECT!
 But it should be after they already get along with each other.

>>CORRECT!
 Socialization with them outside work under pressure should be avoided.

>>CORRECT!
 In my parent period, companies have emphasized that all member of the company is like a family.

>> In my parent\'s time, companies have emphasized that all member of the company is like family.
 But, in modern society, most people separately consider inside and outside work.

>>But, in the modern society, most people consider  life inside and outside of work separately.
 They think that it is important to get along with co-workers, but it in just inside work.

>>CORRECT!
 They don\'t want to meet or have a relationship with them outside work.

>>CORRECT!
 I absolutely understand the thinking.

>>CORRECT!

>>OR: I completely understand them.
 The most popular word is \'Wo-Li-Bal\', it comes from \'work life balance\'.

>>The most popular expression is \'Wo-Li-Bal\', which came from \'work life balance\'.
 It means that work and life are separated.

>>CORRECT!
 Surely, It depends on the person and the kind of work.

>>Surely, it depends on the person and the kind of work he or she does.
 When I was in Japan, I got along with my colleagues and sometimes we have met outside work.

>>CORRECT!
 And they went to Jeju and we enjoyed together after I moved to Jeju island.

>> After moving to Jeju Island, they came to visit  me and we enjoyed spending time together.
 But, the important thing is that it was what we wanted, not under compulsion.

>>CORRECT!

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