2-60th Homework

2016-10-28 · 첨삭 강사 Charry

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This subject is same with yesterday. But I don't care of it. I can rewrite the assay about the same subject in the different way. USA is very powerful in the world. Maybe, the most powerful nation in the world. After Soviet Union collapsed, USA have been the super-power nation. I think USA is the best as the nation, but I don't think that it is the best place to live in there. Of course, I don't have any experience that have lived in USA. Therefore, this opinion would be superficial. But this assay is to write my feeling. First, I don't want to be shotted by police or robber. We could easily hear the news about the shot accident in USA. It often happened. It has a high probability. Second, I don't want to pay a lot of money for curing a cough. The insurance system of USA is notorious for paying expensive. I cannot understand it. Is it possible to pay tens thousand dollars for curing the cough? Third, I dislike USA that meddle in other countries.The powerful nation isn't always a good.

강사 첨삭

Hello, [이름]! :)I had no idea the question for today and yesterday are the same. I thought I posted a different one. But I want to praise you for doing your best to rewrite your essay in a different manner. I think it\'s not wise to live in the USA nowadays because of its current economic status. In addition to that, the cost of living is too high and too stressful. I\'d rather stay in the Philippines. I think the life here is easier and better. I hope you\'re having a great day. See you again on Tuesday. ^_^ ~Teacher C[이름] This subject is same with yesterday. >> CORRECT! OR >> The topic is the same as yesterday. But I don\'t care of it. >> But I don\'t care. I can rewrite the assay about the same subject in the different way. >> I can rewrite the essay about the same subject in a different way. USA is very powerful in the world. >> The USA is very powerful in the world. Maybe, the most powerful nation in the world. >> Maybe, it is considered as the most powerful nation in the world. After Soviet Union collapsed, USA have been the super-power nation. >> After the Soviet Union has collapsed, the USA has become a super-power nation. I think USA is the best as the nation, but I don\'t think that it is the best place to live in there. >> I think the USA is the best nation, but I don\'t think it is the best place to live in. Of course, I don\'t have any experience that have lived in USA. >> Of course, I don\'t have any experience in living in the USA. Therefore, this opinion would be superficial. >> CORRECT! OR >> Therefore, this opinion is a shallow one. But this assay is to write my feeling. >> But this essay is about my feelings. First, I don\'t want to be shotted by police or robber. >> First, I don\'t want to be shot by a police or a robber. We could easily hear the news about the shot accident in USA. >> We could easily hear the news about the shooting accidents in the USA. It often happened. >> CORRECT! OR >> It is a common situation out there. It has a high probability. >> CORRECT! OR >> There\'s a very high chance. Second, I don\'t want to pay a lot of money for curing a cough. >> CORRECT! OR >> Second, I don\'t want to pay a lot of money just to cure a cough. The insurance system of USA is notorious for paying expensive. >> The insurance system of USA is notorious for expensive contributions.  I cannot understand it. >> CORRECT! OR >> I don\'t get it. Is it possible to pay tens thousand dollars for curing the cough? >> Is it possible to pay tens of thousands of dollars just to cure a cough? Third, I dislike USA that meddle in other countries. >> Third, I dislike the USA because they meddle with other countries\' issues. The powerful nation isn\'t always a good. >> The powerful nation isn\'t always good.

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