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2019-02-08 · 첨삭 강사 Jedah

학생이 쓴 원문

[What does seeing a rainbow mean to you?] Wow, I forgot when I saw a rainbow. Maybe usually I am working in the office all day. So, I just forgot about the rainbow. Thank you for reminding me. When I went to a conference to present my research, it was raining a lot. I came back to the car after finish my presentation well. When I drive the car to the school, I found a rainbow in the bridge. It was not amazing, but something relaxed me. I felt calm happiness like \'I am going well, I keeping well everything\' When I was kid, I learned the meaning of the rainbow is luck. But, nowadays, many people don\'t have a time to seeing rainbow even it was appeared, because they are busy in the workplace. The fact that it was difficult to see the sky is too sad, but it\'s true. Today, I am very happy and feel warm with a rainbow in my mind.

강사 첨삭

Hi [이름]! Thank you for sending your homework on time. I appreciate it a lot! ^ ^

Thank you for sharing your thoughts. ^ ^ I agree with you, people are so busy that they tend to ignore simple but wonderful things; just like a rainbow. They say that a rainbow is a symbol of hope, luck and so many things. But regardless of what it symbolizes, every time I see a rainbow, it always cheers me up and I\'m amazed with it\'s colors and beauty! ^ ^

-Teacher Jedah


Wow, I forgot when I saw a rainbow.

>>Wow, I have forgotten the last time I saw a rainbow.
Maybe usually I am working in the office all day.

>>Maybe because I usually work and stay in the office all day.
So, I just forgot about the rainbow.

>>So, I have totally forgotten about it.

Thank you for reminding me. 

>>Correct
When I went to a conference to present my research, it was raining a lot.

>>Correct
I came back to the car after finish my presentation well.

>>I came back to the car after I have finished the presentation well.
When I drive the car to the school, I found a rainbow in the bridge.

>>When I was driving my car back to school, I saw a rainbow by the bridge. 
It was not amazing, but something relaxed me.

>>Correct
I felt calm happiness like \'I am going well, I keeping well everything\'

>>I felt calm and suddenly happy and I said to myself; \"I\'m doing and keeping everything well\".
When I was kid, I learned the meaning of the rainbow is luck.

>>When I was a kid, I was told that the meaning of a rainbow is luck.
But, nowadays, many people don\'t have a time to seeing rainbow even it was appeared, because they are busy in the workplace.

>>But, nowadays, many people don\'t have the time to look at the rainbow even if it appeared, because they are busy in their workplace. 
The fact that it was difficult to see the sky is too sad, but it\'s true.

>>The fact that it\'s also difficult to see a clear sky is too sad, but it\'s true. 
Today, I am very happy and feel warm with a rainbow in my mind.

>>Correct

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