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2011-11-03 · 첨삭 강사 Vaness

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Actually, I’d like to be a flight attendant. Since my major is Horticulture, most people asked me “Why do you want to be a flight attendant in spite of your major?" I could learn through my major experience so I used to answer them by saying, "While I'm studying I have learned to be affectionate and warm-hearted person because we learned how to love and take care of plants. I personally think that plants are the same as humans since plants can’t live and grow without concern, care or love." And I worked as an English academy teacher. Honestly, at this moment I could not speak in English at all. As a teacher I had to study more in English for them as well as me. In addition, Despite of my bad english skills I tried to have a close relationship with foreign friend. From that on, I eventually improved my speaking skills and learned how to deal with other people. Teaching was a rewarding job because I've got experience as much as I gave.

강사 첨삭

Keep up the great work.^^   Actually, I\'d like to be a flight attendant. >> CORRECT Since my major is Horticulture, most people asked me \'Why do you want to be a flight attendant in spite of your major?\' >> CORRECT I could learn through my major experience so I used to answer them by saying, \"While I\'m studying I have learned to be affectionate and warm-hearted person because we learned how to love and take care of plants. I personally think that plants are the same as humans since plants can't live and grow without concern, care or love.\" >> CORRECT And I worked as an English academy teacher. >> CORRECT Honestly, at this moment I could not speak in English at all. >> CORRECT As a teacher I had to study more in English for them as well as me. >> CORRECT In addition, Despite of my bad english skills I tried to have a close relationship with foreign friend. >> In addition, despite of my bad English skills I tried to have a close relationship with foreign friend. (Capitalization) From that on, I eventually improved my speaking skills and learned how to deal with other people. >> From then on, I eventually improved my speaking skills and learned how to deal with other people. Teaching was a rewarding job because I\'ve got experience as much as I gave. >> CORRECT

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