2-9th Homework
학생이 쓴 원문
In my mind the heroes are almost in the movies. This is not real situation. In the real I would find my parents as my heroes. Maybe, most of people would consider their parents as the heroes. If we except it, we could not easily find the heroes. Sometimes, we could hear about the people whom the mass media introduce as the braves. In this case, we forgot soon all that. I think the real heroes are around us. I think a person who work well its job bearing a responsibility is the real hero. The hero is not magnificent in my mind. We could not find at all if we find the heroes like the character in the movies. The heroes in the movies never die and error. They always go ahead in the right way. But we are humans who may try and error. Somedays, we saw the brave man in the media. After being introducing, the person was shown as he or she was a very perfect person. But it was not his' or her's intention but it was made by the media. And we made a mistake the person as the perfect.
강사 첨삭
Hello, [이름]! ^^
Thank you very much for promptly doing your homework!
I think you\'re right when you said the heroes in real life don\'t wear a mask, a cape and outrageous outfits.
Most of the time, they\'re just ordinary people doing extraordinary things.
We are surrounded by them everyday.
But unlike in the movies, the real life heroes are also normal people who are capable of making bad decisions and committing errors.
In my opinion, there is a hero in each and everyone of us.
It\'s just a matter of letting it out when the moment or time calls for it.
We can be heroes in our own little ways.
A nurse who revives a patient is a hero.
A fireman who puts out the fire and makes sure that no one gets hurt from it is a hero.
A policeman who ensures the safety of the people it serves is a hero.
A social worker who makes sure that domestic violence is controlled is a hero.
A hard working father or mother is a hero in his or her child/children\'s eyes.
We are indeed surrounded by heroes and we meet them and deal with them everyday.
It\'s funny that mass media don\'t show this.
Anyhow, that\'s my view regarding this matter.
I hope you\'re having a great day.
See you again on Tuesday.
~Teacher C[이름] ^^
In my mind the heroes are almost in the movies.
>> [DO YOU MEAN]: The heroes that exist in my mind are the ones that are in the movies.
This is not real situation.
>> This is not a real situation.
In the real I would find my parents as my heroes.
>> [DO YOU MEAN]: In reality, I find/consider my parents as my heroes.
Maybe, most of people would consider their parents as the heroes.
>> Maybe, most people would consider their parents as their heroes.
If we except it, we could not easily find the heroes.
>> If we take them into exception, we could not easily find heroes.
Sometimes, we could hear about the people whom the mass media introduce as the braves.
>> Sometimes, we could hear about the people whom the mass media introduce as the brave ones.
In this case, we forgot soon all that.
>> In this case, we soon forget about them.
I think the real heroes are around us.
>> CORRECT!
OR >> I think we are surrounded by the real heroes.
I think a person who work well its job bearing a responsibility is the real hero.
>> I think a person who works well at his job and bears the responsibility given to him is the real hero.
The hero is not magnificent in my mind.
>> A hero is not magnificent in my mind.
OR >> For me, a hero does not have to be magnificent.
We could not find at all if we find the heroes like the character in the movies.
>> [DO YOU MEAN]: We won\'t find any heroes if we look for the hero characters in the movies.
The heroes in the movies never die and error.
>> The heroes in the movies never die and commit any errors.
They always go ahead in the right way.
>> [DO YOU MEAN]: They always do the right thing.
But we are humans who may try and error.
>> But we are humans who may experience trials and commit errors.
Somedays, we saw the brave man in the media.
>> Somedays, we see a brave man in the media.
After being introducing, the person was shown as he or she was a very perfect person.
>> [DO YOU MEAN]: After being introduced, the person is depicted as a very perfect person.
But it was not his\' or her\'s intention but it was made by the media.
>> [DO YOU MEAN]: That is not his or her intention but the media does it for him or her.
And we made a mistake the person as the perfect.
>> And we mistake the person as perfect.
OR >> We think that he or she is a perfect person.
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