(2) task2:Large international companies are becoming more powerful Do you think this is positive or
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And this development makes our lives more comfortable and easier. For example, we can catch a taxi or shared car with only a few click on mobile phone.
In conclusion, there are some drawbacks such as destroying local industry and characters though. The many advantages lead to be global society and reduce a gap of life style. Therefore, many people are allowed to get huge chances and convenient life.
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And this development makes our lives more comfortable and easier. For example, we can catch a taxi or shared car with only a few click on mobile phone.
>>And this development makes our lives more comfortable and easier. For example, we can catch a taxi or share cars with only few clicks on mobile phone.
In conclusion, there are some drawbacks such as destroying local industry and characters though.
>>However, there are some drawbacks such as the destruction of local industries and business personnel.
The many advantages lead to be global society and reduce a gap of life style. Therefore, many people are allowed to get huge chances and convenient life.
>>The many advantages can lead to a global society and can reduce the gap of life. Therefore, many people are allowed to get bigger chances and more convenient life.
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