2. Topic: life (preparing for the conversation final exam in my school)
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Because I like economics and studying, I'll be a public service worker who treats economic matter. That's the job which I want to do.
So let's go to the second things. What is the best way to make my life succesfully. The important things to do that is good relationships between people and enjoying my job and reading many books.
By reading books you will get an intelligence form them and could use it to life matters. Without books, you will make your ife unsubsttentially. And relationships with people is needless to say. There are many bestseller aobut relationships. That represents its importance. I read the book 'how to win friends and influence people. The main contents which I remember is 'always listen carefully to other people's saying'. I remember that phrase still now. It made a big difference in my life. Before I got that habit, my life wasn't happy because I always had trouble with people. But now is different.
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Hi there! It\'s feels good to read this composition you dropped. I am really happy to know that you are making a big step on planning your future.This composition helped me to know you better and I must say you impressed me.Let us talk about this later. See you!
^^T.Sheela^..
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>>Continuation
Because I like economics and studying, I\'ll be a public service worker who treats economic matter.
>>Because I like Economics and I like studying. I will be a public servant who will deal with economic issues.
That\'s the job which I want to do.
>>That is the job that I wanted to do.
So let\'s go to the second things.
>>So let us proceed to the second part.
What is the best way to make my life succesfully.
>>What is the best way to make life successful?
The important things to do that is good relationships between people and enjoying my job and reading many books.
>>The important things is to have a good relationship with other people, enjoying your job and reading many books.
By reading books you will get an intelligence form them and could use it to life matters.
>>By reading books, you can get some knowledge and information that can be use to real life situations.
Without books, you will make your ife unsubsttentially.
>>Without books, your life is unsubstantial.
And relationships with people is needless to say.
>>And your relationship with other people too.
There are many bestseller aobut relationships.
>>There are many bestseller about relationships.
That represents its importance.
>>Things that represent it\'s important.
I read the book \'how to win friends and influence people.
>>I read the book, \"How to Win Friends and Influence People\".
The main contents which I remember is \'always listen carefully to other people\'s saying\'.
>>The part which I remembered well is \"always listen carefully to what other people are saying\".
I remember that phrase still now.
>>I remember that phrase until now.
It made a big difference in my life.
>>CORRECT
Before I got that habit, my life wasn\'t happy because I always had trouble with people.
>>Before I had that habit, my life was not happy because I always had troubles with other people.
But now is different.
>>But now it is different.
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>>CORRECT
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