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2017-02-20 · 첨삭 강사 Lynn

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I am worried about Korea's youth unemployment rate. I am a lucky woman having one but many youth don't have their job. I think many korean company advance abroad for new bussiess. In the future my children might advance abroad for their job but I don't want it. I hope many korean company would build many factories in my country for our youth's future.

강사 첨삭

Hi there Ms. [이름]!
Unemployment is a global problem. In the Philippines, most newly graduates from colleges/universities are eager to work abroad. They feel like they can\'t find better jobs here which they could earn enough to support themselves and their families.
Take care!
~T. Lynn
I am worried about Korea\'s youth unemployment rate.
>> correct!
I am a lucky woman having one but many youth don\'t have their job.
>> I am a lucky woman having a job but many youths don\'t have jobs.
I think many korean company advance abroad for new bussiess.
>> I think many Korean companies expand their businesses abroad or look for other business opportunities abroad..
In the future my children might advance abroad for their job but I don\'t want it.
>> In the future my children might have to go abroad to find a job but I don\'t want that to happen.
I hope many korean company would build many factories in my country for our youth\'s future.
>> I hope many Korean companies would build many factories in my country for our youth\'s future.

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