2011-05-20
학생이 쓴 원문
I can't go to capital area. Because I've lived in Daegu, Busan. That places are southland.
So it's not easy to go to Northland- Namsan Tower, 63 building something like that.
But I really want to go there and enjoy it.
But Temple - Bulguksa , I've been there many times.
It's near my city. And when I was student , I often went there on picnic in school .
That time, we have to look around in group . so I didn't enjoy it well.
I hope I go to Geongju alone someday. So I enjoy many cultural heritage - Temple , royal tomb , and so on.
강사 첨삭
Hi Ms. [Name]! A wonderful Monday to you! Thank you so much for sharing you뭨e experiences with me. Anyway, there are a lot of time to go to Namsan Tower and maybe I can go with you someday! Hehehehehe.. I뭢 still hoping for that. I also heard that Bulguksa Temple is so nice too. You뭨e correct that you can enjoy cultural heritage in Geongju.. I would like to go there too. Have a great Day ahead! ---Sarah--- (*_*)
I can't go to capital area. Because I've lived in Daegu, Busan. That places are southland. >> I can뭪 go to the capital city because I뭢 living in Daegu which is in Busan right now and it뭩 the southern aprt of Korea.So it's not easy to go to Northland- Namsan Tower, 63 building something like that.
>> That뭩 why its not easy to go there because it뭩 in the northern area just like the 63 building too.But I really want to go there and enjoy it. >> CorrectBut Temple - Bulguksa , I've been there many times.
>> But I뭭e been to Bulguksa Temple for many times already.It's near my city. And when I was student , I often went there on picnic in school . >> It뭩 near in my city and when I was a student, I often went there on a picnic in the school.That time, we have to look around in group . so I didn't enjoy it well.>> That time, we have to look around by group so I didn뭪 enjoyed it well.I hope I go to Geongju alone someday. So I enjoy many cultural heritage - Temple , royal tomb , and so on.
>> I hope I could go to Geongju alone someday so I could enjoy looking at many cultural heritage such as the temple, royal tomb and so on
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