2011. 5. 23
학생이 쓴 원문
I'm ganna tell about myself.
Today i introduce myself.
My name is [이름].
I'm 22 years old and I'm a student.
However. this year is my vacation. I want to use the vacation to improving myself.
I live with my family in Seoul.
My family mamber is father, mother and younger sister.
A lot of people say I look like mother and father both.
My appearance is similar to father and my personality is similar to mother.
And me and sister are very similar, like twins.
I'm bright, cheerful and very careful person.
But have a sensitive feeling and negative.
My strength is good personality and a side face. (kidding)
Every year, every month, every day and every time I make a plane for
my visionand try to achieve my dream.
강사 첨삭
Hi there my dear [이름]..:)
Its nice to know that you can express your ideas well in English,thats a job well done my dear!Just try to polish your vocabularies too for additional writing element..^^
Anyway,you, having a good face is nota joke...thats true!
Talk to you again my dear..T.Cam
I'm ganna tell about myself.
>>correct!
>>Im gonna tell you about myself.Today i introduce myself.
>>Today, I will introduce myselfMy name is [이름].
>>correct!I'm 22 years old and I'm a student.
>>correct!However. this year is my vacation. I want to use the vacation to improving myself.
>>However, this year is my vacation so I want to use this vacation in improving myself.
>>However, this year is my vacation so I want to use this time to make my self more productive.I live with my family in Seoul.
>>correct!My family mamber is father, mother and younger sister.
>>My family consists of my father,mother and my younger sister.A lot of people say I look like mother and father both.
>>A lot of people say I look like my mom and dad.My appearance is similar to father and my personality is similar to mother.
>>correct!And me and sister are very similar, like twins.
>>I and my sister look very similar; like twins!I'm bright, cheerful and very careful person.
>>correct!But have a sensitive feeling and negative.
>>But sometimes sensitive and pessimist.My strength is good personality and a side face. (kidding)
>>I have a good personality and face..:)Every year, every month, every day and every time I make a plane formy visionand try to achieve my dream.
>>Every year, every month, every day and every time I make a plan formy vision and try to achieve my dream.
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