^^2011, 5, 4
학생이 쓴 원문
Already, time is being May.
Time is so fast.
When I was child, I didn't know that time is important.
That time i thought that if human born, we live forever.
While I grow up, I learned human die someday.
When i knew that, I got shock.
Still now I can't image to die.
We can't catch a time. So we should a time valuably.
강사 첨삭
Hello there [이름] my dear,
Thank you so much for the composition..
Youre right, we dont know what will happen tomorrow or the next time, coz time is uncertain.We just need to value time and always remember to tell your loved ones how important they are to them now that you still have time..:)
And for that reason, I want to thank you so much for everything my dear..
T.Cam
Already, time is being May.>>Its already the month of May.
>>Its already May.
Time is so fast.
Time is so fast.
>>correct!
>>Time really flies!
When I was child, I didn't know that time is important.
When I was child, I didn't know that time is important.
>>When I was a child, I didnt know that time is important.
>>When I was a child I wasnt aware that time is important.
That time i thought that if human born, we live forever.
That time i thought that if human born, we live forever.
>>That time, I thought that if someone was born, he's gonna live forever.
While I grow up, I learned human die someday.
While I grow up, I learned human die someday.
>>but when I grow older. I learned that people are going to die.
When i knew that, I got shock.
When i knew that, I got shock.
>>correct!
Still now I can't image to die.
>>Until now, I cant imagine that Im gonna die soon.
We can't catch a time. So we should a time valuably.
We can't catch a time. So we should a time valuably.
>>We dont know what will happen tomorrw, so we should value time always.
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