2012.03-28

2012-03-28 · 첨삭 강사 Joan

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It has recently been announced that a large shopping center may be built in your neighborhood. Do you support or oppose this plan? Why? Use specific reasons and details to support your answer. None. There is notthing. I Think, This year is hard to economy side. So, more and more hard to get a work. than, opening of the store? Ooh.I think that not a good idea. hum... today, I don't have nothing to say. Ah..,Today, my boiler machine was broken!!!! I bath cold water. It feel like shaking haire in freeze lake water. And than, My fever was being high. So, I can't go to the school. But, now, I'm here in work-place. :))))) thay don't accep absence. and I recovered now. hahaha. See you tomorrow~

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Hi^^ Too bad you had a cold shower today ^^ Well look at the brighter side, don\'t you know that cold water is good for your hair? kk Check out the corrections I made for you. I commend you for answering the question while elaborating your opinion^^ See you in class^^ T\' Michelle^^ It has recently been announced that a large shopping center may be built in your neighborhood. >>CORRECT! Do you support or oppose this plan? >>CORRECT! Why? >>CORRECT! Use specific reasons and details to support your answer. >>CORRECT!None. >>CORRECT! There is notthing. >>There is no shopping center nearby.I Think, This year is hard to economy side. >> I think, this year our economy is on its down side.So, more and more hard to get a work. >> So, we need to work harder to get a job.than, opening of the store? >> Then, they say we\'d open a store? Ooh.I think that not a good idea. >>Oh, I think it is not a good idea.hum... today, I don\'t have nothing to say.>> Today, I don\'t have anything to say.Ah..,Today, my boiler machine was broken!!!! >> Today, my heater was broken.I bath cold water. >>I bathed with cold water.It feel like shaking haire in freeze lake water. >> It felt like my hair froze in the lake water. And than, My fever was being high. So, I can\'t go to the school. >>And then, my fever went high so I can\'t go to the school. But, now, I\'m here in work-place. :))))) >> But now, I am here in my work place.thay don\'t accep absence. >>They don\'t allow absence.and I recovered now. >> I recovered now.hahaha.See you tomorrow~ >> See you tomorrow.

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