2012.08.01
학생이 쓴 원문
Let's practice your writing skill. If you have the power and money to help restore our environment, what will you do?
Than, I will buy huge yard what didn't developmented yet and hire poor people.
And I will give mission to raise and to gard for environment.
Why I hire poor people is to give some chance to earn.
And I will establish organization. this is the way what gave me money continued.
because it is important to keep more than build. keeping is hard. it need to me to earn and to have a power. So, this two things are what I will do If I have money and power.
강사 첨삭
Hi there! Good evening! I\'m glad you were able to do your best writing a composition. Just keep up what you are doing because practice makes perfect.
Take care. Have a great day ahead!
T. Leny ^^
Let\'s practice your writing skill.If you have the power and money to help restore our environment, what will you do?Than, I will buy huge yard what didn\'t developmented yet and hire poor people.
>>>I will buy then a huge yard that isn\'t develop yet and I will hire poor people.
And I will give mission to raise and to gard for environment.
>>>And I will have a mission to raise funds and guard the environment.
Why I hire poor people is to give some chance to earn.>>>The reason why I hire poor people is to give them some chance to earn money.And I will establish organization.
>>> And I will establish an organization.
this is the way what gave me money continued.
>>> In this way, what earned me money will continue.
because it is important to keep more than build.
>>> Because it is more important to keep than to build.
>>> OR: Because keeping a thing is more important than building it.
keeping is hard.
>>> Keeping it is hard.
>>> OR: Keeping it is difficult.
it need to me to earn and to have a power.
>>> I need it to earn and to have power.
So, this two things are what I will do If I have money and power.
>>So, these two things are waht I will do if I have the money and power.
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