2013.03.05 Homework.
학생이 쓴 원문
Kim Taehee is a popular star in Korea. She is famous for being intelligent and beatiful. The reason I chose her is not because that she is a popular star but that she has what I don't have. Also, at that time Kim Taehee was poped up in my head. If I looked like her and was intelligent, my life definately would be different from now. I might have had a happy family with a husband who is very sweet, good in personality and attractive like Jo Insung and a baby who looks like him. Plus, I would have worked for the company I want to work. I would be more confident of myself.
Anyway, what I said above is just hypothetical situation. So I need to focus on what I have in my life and try to improve myself and then grow up everday.
here is one thing very important, try not to compare me to others, just go on my way.
thanks for giving a chance to think that I would look like KimTaehee. =)
강사 첨삭
A great evening to you!
Thank you so much for sharing me your precious thoughts.^^
I know that there is a Kim Taehee living inside of you.
You just need to be confident about it.
You are a great woman and you can do anything.^^
Smile always!
--- T. Kristel
Kim Taehee is a popular star in Korea.
>> Correct!
She is famous for being intelligent and beatiful.
>> She is famous for being intelligent and beautiful.
The reason I chose her is not because that she is a popular star but that she has what I don\'t have.
>> The reason I chose her is not because she is a popular star but the reason that she has what I don\'t have.
Also, at that time Kim Taehee was poped up in my head.
>> Also, at that time Kim Taehee popped up in my mind.
If I looked like her and was intelligent, my life definately would be different from now.
>> If I looked like her and was intelligent, my life definitely would be different from now.
I might have had a happy family with a husband who is very sweet, good in personality and attractive like Jo Insung and a baby who looks like him.
>> I may have a happy family with a husband who is very sweet, good in personality and attractive like Jo Insung and a baby who looks like him.
Plus, I would have worked for the company I want to work.
>> Plus, I would have the chance to work for the company I want to work for.
I would be more confident of myself.>> Correct!Anyway, what I said above is just hypothetical situation. >> Anyway, what I said above is just a hypothetical situation.
So I need to focus on what I have in my life and try to improve myself and then grow up everday.
>> Here is one very important thing, try not to compare me to others, just go on my way.here is one thing very important, try not to compare me to others, just go on my way.>> Here is one thing very important, try not to compare me to others, just go on my way.thanks for giving a chance to think that I would look like KimTaehee. =)
>> Thanks for giving a chance to think that I would look like KimTaehee. =)
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